Heavy rains in the northern Kyusyu
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The heavy rains continue from yesterday in the northern Kyusyu. Many disasters occurred among many parts of the west Japan.
My friends live in the northern Kyusyu. I was worried they were damaged from heavy rains. Fortunately they had escaped the disaster so far. I hope heavy rains will be stopped as soon as possible.
My friends live in the northern Kyusyu. I was worried they were damaged from heavy rains. Fortunately they had escaped the disaster so far. I hope heavy rains will be stopped as soon as possible.
Heavy rains in the northern Kyusyu
The heavy rains continue from yesterday in the northern Kyusyu.
Many disasters occurred in several parts of the western Japan.
My friends live in the northern Kyusyu.
I was worried they were hurt by the heavy rains.
Fortunately they have escaped the disaster so far.
I hope the heavy rains will be stopped as soon as possible.
Here are a few explanations of what I did:
You don't usually need "the" when referring to a location by it's name (like Kyusyu or western Kyusyu). If you wanted to describe the place without using it's name, you would need "the." (They live in the western part of Japan.)
I changed "damaged from" to "hurt by" because it looked like you were talking about your friends. People and animals are hurt by things, but objects are damaged. It's just a strange way of separating the living from the nonliving.
I changed "had" to "have" because you say "so far." The rain isn't over yet, so you need present perfect: "have escaped." When this is all over, then you can simply say, "They escaped the disaster."
The last sentence was changed because in English we always present weather as being active. It starts and stops on its own. If there were a person able to stop the rain, then what you wrote would be correct. So you can say, "I hope the oil spill in the Gulf will be cleaned up quickly" because people will at least try to do that. On the other hand, people don't yet control the weather, so you have to say, "I hope the rains will stop."
I hope the rains stop, too!
The Heavy rains continue to persist in the northern Kyusyu.
Many disasters have occurred in several areas of the western Japan.
Some of my friends live in the northern Kyusyu.
I was worried that they may have been hurt by the heavy rains.
Thank you for your correction and polite comment.
One of my friends who lives in Fukuoka prefecture emailed me the rain became light.
Hello Jcaltex
Thank you for your correction and comment.
I think that suddenly heavy rain is awful.