(Will people who live in Hiroshima tell me your favorites?)
This Japanese is perfectly comprehensible, but it sounds unnatural. (It is not only unnatural, but also feeble and timid.) It could be improved with little changes.
I changed three parts. The most important thing is that an appeal sentence would be better without は. Next, 人 should be 方, which is an honorific expression; however, this is not the main reason that the sentence is unnatural. Lastly, the topic of this conversation is clearly ‘anything good’; so, you have to mark 何かおすすめ as the topic. That is, it should be 何かおすすめは. Theoretically speaking, to put the topic sign on 'those who live in Hiroshima' is obviously strange, since you don't want to talk about those people.
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Many learners of Japanese are bad writing at an "appeal sentence", and moreover native Japanese correctors also do not seem to deal with it well, even though it is very easy. 広島に住んでいる人は、何かおすすめがありますか？ (Will people who live in Hiroshima tell me your f