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I wrote an essay on 'Does society give the rights of animals enough consideration?'
I'd like you to give some advice for better writing.
Today, animals are essential for our lives.
As far as I concerned, it seems that the right of animal tend to be ignored.
We should reconsider how we live eith animals.
Zoo are said to help people, especially children, to learn how animals live.
But some people insist that zoos should be closed and let them like as they like.
They say it is pity for animals to live in such small space oly for human's entertainment.
From another viewpoint, the opinion that zoo protect animals by keeping some endangered species could be true.
So, we have some way to go to solve this matter.
The pet industry have grown in recent years.
Now, more and more people are starting to have their own pet.
But after a while, some of them are tired of bringing their pet up and in a worse case, they abondon them.
I think the pet industry tend to focus on selling animals and appealing in a good light.
We should consider animals are living creatures like human beings.
The fact that animals are often used in experiments before products like medicines , cosmetics and foods come out on the market is unknown to mose Japanese.
So, some organizations against using animal in experiment claim that we should confirm produce process of what we buy.
But we cannot avoid some experiments for our health and safety.
Companies should open the information of their products for consumers who mind using animal experiment.
Therefore, we should reconsider the role of animals.
They may be as our family, or may sometimes be tools for our lives.
There are many opinion, but we have to compromise to some extent.
I'd like you to give some advice for better writing.
Today, animals are essential for our lives.
As far as I concerned, it seems that the right of animal tend to be ignored.
We should reconsider how we live eith animals.
Zoo are said to help people, especially children, to learn how animals live.
But some people insist that zoos should be closed and let them like as they like.
They say it is pity for animals to live in such small space oly for human's entertainment.
From another viewpoint, the opinion that zoo protect animals by keeping some endangered species could be true.
So, we have some way to go to solve this matter.
The pet industry have grown in recent years.
Now, more and more people are starting to have their own pet.
But after a while, some of them are tired of bringing their pet up and in a worse case, they abondon them.
I think the pet industry tend to focus on selling animals and appealing in a good light.
We should consider animals are living creatures like human beings.
The fact that animals are often used in experiments before products like medicines , cosmetics and foods come out on the market is unknown to mose Japanese.
So, some organizations against using animal in experiment claim that we should confirm produce process of what we buy.
But we cannot avoid some experiments for our health and safety.
Companies should open the information of their products for consumers who mind using animal experiment.
Therefore, we should reconsider the role of animals.
They may be as our family, or may sometimes be tools for our lives.
There are many opinion, but we have to compromise to some extent.
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I wrote an essay on titled, "Does society give the rights of animals enough consideration?".
I'd like you to give me some advice for better writing.to improve my writing.
Today, animals are essential for to our lives.
As far as I am concerned, it seems that the rights of animals tend to be ignored.
We should reconsider how we live with animals.
Zoos are said to help people, especially children, to learn how animals live.
But some people insist that zoos should be closed and let them like the animals live as they like.
They say it is pitiful for animals to live in such a small space only for human's entertainment. to entertain humans.
From another viewpoint Although, the opinion that zoos protect animals by keeping some endangered species alive could be true.
So, we have need to have some way to go to solve this matter.
The pet industry has grown in recent years.
But after a while, some of them are tired of bringing their pet up raising their pet and in a worst case, they abandon them.
I think the pet industry tends to focus too much on selling animals and appealing in a good light.
We should consider animals are living creatures like human beings.
The fact that animals are often used in experiments before products like medicines, cosmetics and foods come out on the market is unknown to most Japanese people.
Companies should open the information of their products for consumers who mind don't like using animal experiment.
They may be as like our family, or may sometimes be tools for our lives.
"So, some organizations against using animal in experiment claim that we should confirm produce process of what we buy."
I don't know what you mean here though. Other than that, really good job!
As far as I concerned, though, it seems that the rights of animasl tend to be ignored.When you make one point: "animals are essential for our lives", and then in the next sentence give the another view of that point, it is good to use words like "though", or "however" as I put in your correction. It means that your viewpoint is slightly different. :D
For example,zoos are said to help people, especially children, to learn how animals live.
So, we have some way to gobefore wesolve this matter.
The pet industry has alsogrown in recent years.
But after a while, some of thembecome tired of raising the animal,and inthe worst case, they abandon them.
So, some organizations who are against using animal in experiments claim that we should confirm the production process of what we buy.
Companies should offer such information on their products for consumers who don't want to support using animal experiment.
There are many opinions, but we all have to compromise to some extent.