英検作文対策:Japan should legalize same-sex marriages.

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May 15, 2019 01:42 eiken 英検
I have been honing my essay writing skills to prepare for an English proficiency test that will be held on the 2nd of June. I would like to practice writing about some major themes and expand my vocabulary especially in regards to politics, technology, and economics. Would you correct my essay below? I would be grateful if you could show me more proper ways to express my opinions.

[task] Write an essay on the given topic. Structure: Introduction, main body, and conclusion. Suggested length: 120-150 words.

[topic] Japan should legalize same-sex marriages.

my answer: I think that Japan should legalize same-sex marriages for the following two reasons.
First, from a human rights standpoint, everyone should be respected the right to marry a person despite their gender.
Second, the benefits from taking the from of marriage should bee guaranteed to all. Family is admitted as the smallest element of the society and marriage can help LGBT people to enjoy stable lives. Now some municipalities are issuing "the domestic partnership certificates" to same-sex couples that grants them their own rights. The concept of offering the certificates is good, however, the service is only local and doesn't help those people to enjoy as enough service as legally married couples do.
For these reasons, I think that the Japanese government should make a law to approve same-sex marriages.