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朱恩
  • In addition, the author must also provide clear evidence for the claimed susceptibility to osteoporousis is the result of consuming dairy products, not other some factors.
  • In addition, the author must also provide clear evidence that the alleged increase in susceptibility to osteoporousis is directly linked to the consumption of dairy products, and not other some factors.

Jan 15, 2014 11:48 Public The argument of dairy produ...
mowen
  • The sample also have to be representative of all people, with different backgrounds, different health status and different dietary habits.
  • The sample must represent a diverse population, with different backgrounds, different states of well being and different dietary habits.

Jan 11, 2014 00:39 Public The author must show that t...
Jonadab
  • XYZ, due to its small size, can accommodate this mismatch and thus overcoming these limitations.
  • XYZ, due to its small size, can accommodate this mismatch and thus overcome these limitations.
  • The verb "overcome" should be in the same tense form as "accommodate" (in this case, the simple present tense), because both of these verbs have the same grammatical relationship with "can". (Jen's correction is another valid way of saying essentially the same thing, but it uses a different grammatical pattern. In order to make the -ing form work for "overcoming", she removed the word "and", making the last part a participial modifier and eliminating the compound verb structure.)

Dec 18, 2013 10:31 Public The approach is constrained...
Tom
  • Last year's higher revenue that A than B does not mean every year A' revenue is higher than B.
  • That last year's revenue that for A was higher than for B does not mean A's revenue will be is higher than B every year.

Dec 9, 2013 10:27 Public Last year's higher reve...
wikkyhorse
  • Last year's higher revenue that A than B does not mean every year A' revenue is higher than B.
  • Even though the revenue for A was higher than B last year, that does not mean it will be true every year.
  • The other people's suggestions are good too.

Dec 9, 2013 10:27 Public Last year's higher reve...
Tom
  • She understand that life could never be the sum of one circumstance and situations could not be always conducive to what I wanted to herself.
  • She understands that life could never be the result sum of one circumstance, and situations could not be always be conducive to what I she wanted to herself.
  • "Sum" = the result of adding two or more things. When you begin in the third person, you should stay in the third person.

Dec 7, 2013 11:56 Public The homeless girl managed t...
  • Their followers and fans would be keen in mirroring all their actions, even including their private lives to get some vicarious experience through their idols’ lives.
  • Their followers and fans would be are keen to mirroring all their actions, even including their private lives, to get some vicarious experience through their idols’ lives.
  • Keen + infinitive, or 'keen on' + gerund.
  • Internet connects millions of people, enabling communication to travel thousands of miles with great ease.
  • The Internet connects millions of people, enabling communication over thousands of miles with great ease.
  • Communication does not travel, though the electronic signals might be said to.

Nov 23, 2013 23:21 Public Along with technological ad...
  • Machines run tirelessly, releasing people from the burden of manual labor.
  • Machines run tirelessly, releasing people of the burden of manual labor.
  • Released from a place or situation, of a burden or feeling.

Nov 23, 2013 23:17 Public Along with technological ad...
Tom
  • Therefore, addressing a financial crisis or a natural disaster happened in one country needs global cooperation and collective efforts.
  • Therefore, addressing a financial crisis, or a natural disaster, happened in one country needs requires global cooperation and collective efforts.
  • I prefer "requires" in this context; "needs" implies lack, while "requires" implies necessity. Need and require are synonyms, but are used in slightly different ways.

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