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I went to fireworks display in Osaka.
There were many people.I ate カキ氷 before fireworks show.
The firework was very big and beautiful!
I spent a special summer time.
There were many people.I ate カキ氷 before fireworks show.
The firework was very big and beautiful!
I spent a special summer time.
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(The) Fireworks
Remember to capitalize the first letter of your title :)
I went to fireworks display in Osaka.
This sentence is not incorrect. But let me challenge you a bit. It sounds more natural to give more a more detailed description. For example:
Recently/Last week/The other day, I went to a fireworks display in Osaka.
I ate a snow cone before the fireworks show.
The fireworks were very big and beautiful!
I spent a special summer time.
This sounds very "Japanese" and is not something a native English speaker would say. Here are a few ways we would express that:
"it is a special memory from summer."
"I had a great time."
"I'll always remember the fireworks display."
"It is one of my favorite things I did this summer."
You came to Japan? I wrote the Tanzaku in Umeda city Tanabata Festival.
I went to a fireworks display in Osaka.
"Display" is countable, so it needs an article here.
There were a lot of people there.
"Many people" is fine, but "a lot of people" is a more common, I think. I would add "there" to specify the location. It seems a bit odd to leave that out.
It was a special summer time.I spent some special time there.
Either of these two seems okay.
Fireworks
You need to capitalize the first word in a title.
Fireworks are plural most of the time.
I went to a fireworks display in Osaka.
You need an article or possessive adjective (my, her, their, etc.) before a destination unless it's "work," "school," or "home." (Or if you're British, "hospital.")
There were so many people!
It's not natural to just say "there were many people." People usually tell how they felt, as well. In this case, I added "so" to mean you were surprised at how many were there.
I (ate / had) (a snow cone / some shave ice) before the (fireworks) show.
You can say "had" instead of "ate."
Hawaiians call it "shave ice!" They're so weird!
The fireworks were really big and (beautiful / incredible)!
"Really" is more casual than "very."
It's not natural to mention that fireworks were "big." You expect them to be. ^_^;
I love summer!
This is more natural.