Is reducing poverty the best way to tackle crime?

Most of your essay is ok, but one of the big problems that you have is that your essay sounds too formulaic. The "First, Second, Third, Finally" structure to an essay is something that most English speakers learn in middle school and end up overusing. I think you can push your skills by using more complicated transitions, like this:


While I think that reducing poverty by itself is a good idea, I don't believe that reducing poverty is the best way to tackle crime.

First, in Japan, most criminals aren't indigent. Many rich people sometimes commit crimes. Furthermore, a crime such as terrorism will not disappear if world poverty is improved, because some terrorists take actions by their religious beliefs. Thus, poverty is not always the main cause of crime.

Nevertheless, in developing countries, some people have to commit crimes in order to survive. Similarly, in developed countries, some poor people are forced to get involved with crimes in order to pay their debts. In such cases, I think reducing poverty can be one of the solutions to tackle crime.

Beyond just reducing poverty, I think that education is the best way to tackle crime. If all people abide by laws, we would eradicate crimes. People who have college degrees tend to have a good job. So, acquiring a good education can improve poverty. We might become able to respect different opinions, religions, and culture through education.