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first is that during Punic War, not only the warriors but also ladies and even children fought and were killed like in Okinawa in during the Pacific War.

The second reason is that the relation between Carthage and Rome is similar to that between of Japan and United States.

The good example is the contents of the piece Peace Treaty.

In other respects Carthage developed their economyic remarkably like Japan.

As a result, Carthage became the one of best developed country in economic temporarily but only for a short period of time.

For Based from the reasons above, I think that Carthage have many points which is very similar to Japan.

I think that Carthage, which was lost defeated during the Punic War, resembles Japan, which was also lost defeated during The Second World War, in many respects.

I think that, in many respects, Carthage, which lost was defeated in the Punic Wars, resembles Japan, which lost was defeated in The Second World War.

I re-ordered the words to make your sentence read more smoothly.

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The first is that, during the Punic Wars, not only the Carthaginian warriors, but also their ladies, and even their children, fought and were killed died, like on Okinawa in the Pacific War.

At the risk of making too many assumptions, I identified the defeated warriors as Carthaginian, and the ladies and children as those of those warriors (though I note that they need not be related to the warriors).

The second reason is that the relationship between Carthage and Rome is similar to that between Japan and United States.

The good example is shown in the contents conditions of the piece treaty between the Allied Powers and the Empire of Japan.

The That is the part of it is requiring the renunciation of their own Japan's army and territories, which it had conquered at one time, and paying a lot of compensation, and the like.

In other respects, Carthage developed their its economy remarkably like Japan.

As a result, Carthage temporarily became the one of best economically developed countries in economic.

For the those reasons above, I think that Carthage have many point which is in many ways very similar to Japan.

I think that Carthage, which lost the Punic War resembles Japan, which lost The Second World War, in many respects.

first is that during the Punic War, not only the warriors but also ladies and even children fought and were killed like Okinawa in the Pacific War.

A good example is the contents of the piece treaty.

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Remember to use capital letters in the title. :)

The Punic War and Japan

Usually when there is a common noun (war) in a name (Punic War), we have to use "the".

I have two reasons why I think so. for this.

The first is that during the Punic War, not only did the warriors fight and die, but also so did the ladies women and even children, fought and were killed like in Okinawa in during the Pacific War.

The A good example is the contents of their piece peace treaties.

If their relationships are similar, then there are many reasons for the similarity. That's why we use "a".

The Part of it is the renunciation of their own army and territories which they conquered at one time, paying a lot of compensation and the like and so on.

I don't understand whose territories and armies were are talking about. Also, who conquered and whom did they conquer. I think you need to use all proper nouns through here to clarify.

As a result, Carthage temporarily became the had one of the best developed country in economies temporarily. (in the world).

For the above reasons above, I think that Carthage have many point which is very similar to Japan.