An Old Tree
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Cycling pass the primary school I graduated from, I noticed the outstretched leaves of the tree from the corner of the school.
That's really an old tree, old enough tree. It said that the age of the tree is older than my grandmother. I guess no one could live longer than that tree. My grandmother told me that in her memories the tree is there when she was born. This ground wasn't a school at that time. The tree stood on the ground alone.
The old tree reminded me of my childhood. I used to climb the tree., steal the birds' eggs, catch the cicadas, whisper and enjoy the cool under the tree with my friends. That was our younger days.
The leaves of the old tree are still green and the trunk is still strong, but why I observed the tree seems like an elderly went through the vicissitudes. Is that she witness the growth of too many people?
Suddenly the words came to my mind, "if there is an afterlife, I would like to be a tree. Standing on the ground forever without feelings and sorrows. A part of me sleep peacefully in the dust, a part of me fly in the beautiful scenery, a part of me scatter in the shade, a part of me bask in the sunshine. I' ll be very quiet. I' ll be very proud. I never depend on someone. I never search for something." I don't remember where are the words from, but I really like it.
That's really an old tree, old enough tree. It said that the age of the tree is older than my grandmother. I guess no one could live longer than that tree. My grandmother told me that in her memories the tree is there when she was born. This ground wasn't a school at that time. The tree stood on the ground alone.
The old tree reminded me of my childhood. I used to climb the tree., steal the birds' eggs, catch the cicadas, whisper and enjoy the cool under the tree with my friends. That was our younger days.
The leaves of the old tree are still green and the trunk is still strong, but why I observed the tree seems like an elderly went through the vicissitudes. Is that she witness the growth of too many people?
Suddenly the words came to my mind, "if there is an afterlife, I would like to be a tree. Standing on the ground forever without feelings and sorrows. A part of me sleep peacefully in the dust, a part of me fly in the beautiful scenery, a part of me scatter in the shade, a part of me bask in the sunshine. I' ll be very quiet. I' ll be very proud. I never depend on someone. I never search for something." I don't remember where are the words from, but I really like it.
Cycling past the primary school I graduated from, I noticed the outstretched leaves of the tree from the corner of the school.
It said that the age of the tree is older than my grandmother.
I used to climb the tree., steal the birds' eggs, catch the cicadas, whisper and enjoy the cool air under the tree with my friends.
They were our younger days.
The leaves of the old tree are still green and the trunk is still strong, but why does the tree seem like an elder who has been through the vicissitudes of life.
Is that she has witnessed the growth of too many people?
A part of me sleeping peacefully in the dust, a part of me flying in the beautiful scenery, a part of me scattering in the shade, a part of me basking in the sunshine.
I'll never depend on someone.
I'll never search for something." I don't remember where are the words are from, but I really like them.
"I'll never search for something"
I think would be better as
"I'll never long for something"
or
"I'll never want for anything"
It feels like that is the intended meaning.
Ahh, that was youth!
I'll never depend on anyone.
I'll never long for anything.
(Trees "search for" sunlight - so the verb long is better.)
For me it makes the whole thing become a story of hurt or loss because of one person in particular. Whilst this may not be the intention, I liked it that way.
Ahh, that was youth!" I like this sentence:)
Your comments and suggestions are really useful, I added to my note. Thinking and absorbing.
Thank you for comment, TNewfieds. I am glad that you read my entry. I really appeciate it. Have a nice weekend:)
My grandmother told me that in her memories, the tree was there when she was born.
I added "was," because even in her memories, the tree was there in the past.
And in the past, we say was, not is.
Those were our younger days.
Is it that she witnessed the growth of too many people?
For every clause, there has to be a subject and a verb.
Is = verb and it = subject
"That," is called a conjunction. That means it connects two clauses.
Suddenly the words came to my mind, "If there is an afterlife, I would like to be a tree.
The first letter in a quotation must be a capital. This is because that the quotation itself is a sentence.
I never depend on anyone.
I think that because you are using a negative sentence, "anyone," is a better word.
Examples:
I don't know anyone.
I don't need anyone.
I'll never want anyone.
I never search for anything." I don't remember where the words are from, but I really like it.
"Anything," works the same way as, "anyone." In a negative sentence it works better than, "something."
I changed your word order later as well. I think (but I'm not quite positive) that the only time we have the verb before the subject is in a question.
Examples:
Are you tired?
But not, "Are you tired."
Nice weekend, Alex:)