Please help me check my self-introduction. I will put it on my Profile

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Apr 20, 2012 13:05
Hi :)

I am Kita in Beijing China. Mandarin is my native language.

I'm studying English because I am interested in United States and Europe. I want to travel there and talk with the people there.

I also want to travel Africa to see their magnificent natural landscape and their totally different life.

I would be happy to receive your messages :)
Patty
Thank you for your correction!
Apr 20, 2012 13:11
  • I am Kita in Beijing China.

  • My name is Kita and I am from Beijing, China,

 
  • I also want to travel Africa to see their magnificent natural landscape and their totally different life.

  • I also want to travel Africa to see their magnificent natural landscapes and experience their way of life.

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Apr 20, 2012 18:15 Kita
Thank you very much for your help. Have a nice day :)

Apr 20, 2012 18:15 Kita
Thank you very much for your help. Have a nice day :)

Apr 20, 2012 18:15 Kita
Thank you very much for your help. Have a nice day :)

Apr 20, 2012 18:15 Kita
Thank you very much for your help. Have a nice day :)

Apr 20, 2012 20:17 Patty
um. . thanks for commenting four times. .

Apr 20, 2012 21:57 Kita
I was replying you on a poor PC, there was something wrong with its Browser :)
Cody
Thank you for your correction!
Apr 20, 2012 13:11
  • I am Kita in Beijing China.

  • I am Kita in from Beijing, China.

 
  • I'm studying English because I am interested in United States and Europe.

  • I'm studying English because I am interested in the United States and Europe.

 

Hello there. I'm just making a few corrections for you, but your English is very, very good. Excellent job, ma'am!

Apr 20, 2012 18:19 Kita
Thank you very much for your help and encouragement. I appreciate it. Have a nice day :)

Apr 20, 2012 18:19 Kita
Thank you very much for your help and encouragement. I appreciate it. Have a nice day :)
Tian
Thank you for your correction!
Apr 20, 2012 13:12
  • I am Kita in Beijing China.

  • I am Kita in Beijing China.consider:I am Kita from Beijing, China.

    "in" is okay but "from" works better

 
  • I'm studying English because I am interested in United States and Europe.

  • I'm studying English because I am interested in the United States and Europe.

    United States when used as an object would have the modifier "the"
    Europe doesn't need it though
    For example: "I am interested in Europe." is okay
    most countries don't require a "the" but the United States is an exception

 
  • I also want to travel Africa to see their magnificent natural landscape and their totally different life.

  • I also want to travel Africa to see their magnificent natural landscape and their totally different life.

    the second "their" is not necessary since "landscape" and "life" are joined together by "and"
    although you can put the second "their" if you want :)
    just some nitpicking
    otherwise, very good writing

 

Apr 20, 2012 18:21 Kita
Thank you very much for your corrections and detailed comments. I appreciate it. Have a nice day :)

Apr 20, 2012 18:21 Kita
Thank you very much for your corrections and detailed comments. I appreciate it. Have a nice day :)
Cody
Thank you for your correction!
Apr 20, 2012 13:15
  • I am Kita in Beijing China.

  • I am My name is Kita in and I am from Beijing, China.

 

Apr 20, 2012 18:22 Kita
Thank you again:)

Apr 20, 2012 18:22 Kita
Thank you again:)
Maverickbc
Thank you for your correction!
Apr 20, 2012 15:33
  • I'm studying English because I am interested in United States and Europe.

  • I'm studying English because I am interested in United States and Europe.

    Canada ?

 
  • I want to travel there and talk with the people there.

  • I want to travel there and talk with the people in those countries.

 

:)))

Apr 20, 2012 18:30 Kita
Sorry Ron, I was writing it in a hurry, so forgot something important. I have rewritten it on my Profile :)

http://lang-8.com/391939

Apr 20, 2012 18:30 Kita
Sorry Ron, I was writing it in a hurry, so forgot something important. I have rewritten it on my Profile :)

http://lang-8.com/391939

Apr 21, 2012 04:58 Maverickbc
Hi Kita :)))

Thanks so much for adding :)))

Have a Super Great Day

Smiles & Hugs

Ron :)))
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