•The topic is:Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
•I hope my friends can help me to correct my essay about:
1,This is a written essay, whether or not the words are colloquial
2, Can it be expressed in a more formal way
3,Better words to use so that the essay is not boring
•Here is my composition:
With the development of society, we have more ways to spend our lives. Some people prefer change and they believes that change make our lives more colourful. But, others hold the opinions that change is not good for us. Change may bring our lives unexpected adverse influences. This essay will look at some of the arguments for and against.
Some persons insist on our lives requires more challenge. Firstly as for individuals, without change our lives are boring. If we do the same things everyday, we will last our enthusiasm about lives. And by change it can make us have more experience which can avoid us becoming a shortsighted person. Some change also give us somehow surprise. Secondly, as for society, change could contribute to the progress of communities. Though, some change have not created any value to the society but at least those failed change can give people some lesson.
However, different people hold different opinions. Others thinks that our lives should not doing change and we ought to doing the similar things everyday. Because no change no failture. Some challenges may bring us many adverse affects which is waste of our time and money. And change will change our routine. These people believes that we should enjoy the ways of living which we lives now. And we don't have to expect to change the ways of living now which may broke up the happiness we have had and we should content.
From my point of view,lives needs change. Change is helpful for the development of society. Though, every coin has two sides that change maybe not obtain good results, whereas most of things couldn't obtainsuccess at once. So we should give up change just for some unpredict outcomes. Therefore, Personally, I believe that we ought to spend our lives with change.
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