Self-Introduction. Is this OK?　

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Mar 20th 2012 17:58

Hi!　I am Ken1.

I live in Fukuoka Prefecture now.

It is about one and half hours from Tokyo by plane.

I am a social insurance and labor consultant,and financial planner.

I want to learn English for business.

Thank you!

こんにちは。Ken1です。

今、福岡県に住んでいます。

東京から飛行機で１時間３０分位のところにあります。

社会保険労務士とファイナンシャルプランナーをやっています。

ビジネスの為に英語を勉強したいと思っています。

宜しくお願いします！

Birdy

Thank you for your correction!

Mar 20th 2012 18:19

It is about one and half hours from Tokyo by plane.
It is about one and a half hours from Tokyo by plane.

I am a social insurance and labor consultant,and financial planner.
I am a social insurance and labor consultant, and a financial planner.

Aliene

Thank you for your correction!

Mar 20th 2012 18:50

Self-Introduction. Is this OK?　
Self-Introduction. Is this ok?

I live in Fukuoka Prefecture now.
I live in Fukuoka Prefecture now.

"Live" is in the present tense so it implies you are currently in Fukuoka. Because of that there's no need to add the word "now"

It is about one and half hours from Tokyo by plane.
It is about one and a half hours from Tokyo by plane.

I am a social insurance and labor consultant,and financial planner.
I am a social insurance and labor consultant, and a financial planner.

krynn82

Thank you for your correction!

Mar 21st 2012 01:34

I am a social insurance and labor consultant,and financial planner.
I am a social insurance and labor consultant and a financial planner.

In my opinion a comma is unnecessary here.

Overall, looks pretty good Ken1!

Brooke

Mar 21st 2012 08:01

Nice to meet you, I hope lang-8 helps you. =}