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This short story is 100% dialogue, and therefore the characterization is a big part of the story.
There are two flat characters in this story, a girl and an adult. The girl is somewhat lost in this discussion between her and the adult because she only spoke two times. “But I don’t sing benna on Sundays” “what if the baker won’t let me feel the bread?” These two sentences made the first character (the girl) very believable; because both times the girl spoke she interrupted the adult.
Base on these two illustrations a person can realize that the girl is young and doesn’t know how to react while being taught. The flat character (the girl) is believable even though she lacks in motivation.
The second character is very believable because she is teaching the girl how to be a woman and how to live in society.”This is how you set a table for dinner with an important guest.” The second character is highly motivated in her teachings even though at times she is mean. “Walk like a lady and not like the slut you are so bent on becoming.” The second character is straight forward but a person can feel the love in her teaching.
The adult wants the girl to be successful; she wants the girl to be a perfect woman. Overall these characters are very credible because of the human characteristics they show.
The style is horrible. The author did not even indent the first sentence. “Wash the white clothes on Monday.” The whole story is one big long sentence. This short story is not even clear about the subject or even what is happening in the story. “What if the baker won’t let me feel the bread?” This short question made it somewhat clear about the plot.
A person can easily get lost in this discussion, because of the writer’s style. There are no quotation marks to indicate that this short story has dialogue in it; however, as for the dialogue, it was very realistic because it enlightens the girl’s perspective on womanhood; therefore the story moved rather smoothly.
The style was very unclear and uninteresting because, of the lack of punctuations.
The subject of this story is womanhood. “Wash color clothes on Tuesday.” This is an example of her new responsibilities as an adult; because she is being taught so she can carry out what she learned. “You are really going to be the kind of woman who the baker won’t let near the bread?” This is another example of her (the girl) responsibilities’. The theme of this story is the responsibilities of womanhood.
There are two flat characters in this story, a girl and an adult. The girl is somewhat lost in this discussion between her and the adult because she only spoke two times. “But I don’t sing benna on Sundays” “what if the baker won’t let me feel the bread?” These two sentences made the first character (the girl) very believable; because both times the girl spoke she interrupted the adult.
Base on these two illustrations a person can realize that the girl is young and doesn’t know how to react while being taught. The flat character (the girl) is believable even though she lacks in motivation.
The second character is very believable because she is teaching the girl how to be a woman and how to live in society.”This is how you set a table for dinner with an important guest.” The second character is highly motivated in her teachings even though at times she is mean. “Walk like a lady and not like the slut you are so bent on becoming.” The second character is straight forward but a person can feel the love in her teaching.
The adult wants the girl to be successful; she wants the girl to be a perfect woman. Overall these characters are very credible because of the human characteristics they show.
The style is horrible. The author did not even indent the first sentence. “Wash the white clothes on Monday.” The whole story is one big long sentence. This short story is not even clear about the subject or even what is happening in the story. “What if the baker won’t let me feel the bread?” This short question made it somewhat clear about the plot.
A person can easily get lost in this discussion, because of the writer’s style. There are no quotation marks to indicate that this short story has dialogue in it; however, as for the dialogue, it was very realistic because it enlightens the girl’s perspective on womanhood; therefore the story moved rather smoothly.
The style was very unclear and uninteresting because, of the lack of punctuations.
The subject of this story is womanhood. “Wash color clothes on Tuesday.” This is an example of her new responsibilities as an adult; because she is being taught so she can carry out what she learned. “You are really going to be the kind of woman who the baker won’t let near the bread?” This is another example of her (the girl) responsibilities’. The theme of this story is the responsibilities of womanhood.
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The girl is somewhat lost in this discussion between her and the adult because she only speaks two times.
“But I don’t sing benna on Sundays.” “What if the baker won’t let me feel the bread?” These two sentences made the first character (the girl) very believable because both times the girl spoke, she interrupted the adult.
Based on these two depictions one can realize that the girl is young and doesn’t know how to react while being taught.
The flat character (the girl) is believable even though she lacks in motivation.
The second character is very believable because she is teaching the girl how to be a woman and how to live in society.”This is how you set a table for dinner for an important guest.” The second character is highly motivated in her teachings even though at times she is mean. sorry if this was a direct quote, "for" sounds better to me
“Walk like a lady and not like the slut you are so bent on becoming.” The second character is straightforward but one can feel the love in her teaching.
The style is horrible, though.
There are no quotation marks to indicate that this short story has dialogue in it; however, as for the dialogue, it was very realistic because it illustrates the girl’s perspective on womanhood; therefore the story moved rather smoothly.
The style was very unclear and uninteresting because of the lack of punctuation.