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Mar 11, 2012 22:37
My daughter and I often go to a club. At noon, her classmate called her. he wanted to go the club with us. After arriving there, to our surprise, all of the members of the club were not there. Why? Where were they?
Maybe the activity was not here. Maybe the activity would not hold today.
I wanted to call someone to ask about it. What a shame! I have just got a now cellphone which have not been input phone number. I could only remember about phone number of my family. I could not think of the others.
Suddenly, I thought of my friends using QQ often. I started to download this software from internet at once. After finishing it, I connected QQ and Sent a message to my friend. Two seconds later, I received a reply of changing the place. When we found this place, the activity has aleady begun for 20 minutes.
Goodness! Anything can happen to me.
Mine Fielder
Mar 12, 2012 00:41
  • Maybe the activity would not hold today.

  • Maybe the activity would not be held today. (be- to make it happen, held = past tense. You write as if in the future, even for stuff yet to happen)

 
  • I have just got a now cellphone which have not been input phone number.

  • I have just got a new cellphone which has not had phone numbers input .

 
  • I could only remember about phone number of my family.

  • I could only remember the phone number of my family. (a phone number is exact, so don't use "about" which is for imprecise things)

 
  • I started to download this software from internet at once.

  • I started to download this software from the internet at once.

 
  • Two seconds later, I received a reply of changing the place.

  • Two seconds later I received a reply notice of changing the place.

 
  • When we found this place, the activity has aleady begun for 20 minutes.

  • When we found this place, the activity had already begun 20 minutes ago.

 

Unlucky! First thing you do with a phone is charge it and import contacts. If you lose phones often, keep a backup on your PC of contact lists.

Thank you for your correction!

 
Mar 12, 2012 16:26 lxf
  • Thanks, you are nice to me. I will. Say thanks to you once again. Have a nice day!
Mar 12, 2012 00:44
  • he wanted to go the club with us.

  • he wanted to go to the club with us.

 
Thank you for your correction!

 
Mar 12, 2012 16:27 lxf
  • Thanks you for your correction. Have a nice day!
Xu Zhehao/ Joon-Hyuk Lee
Mar 12, 2012 00:53

My daughter and I often go to a club and at noon her classmate called her wanting to go the club with us. After arriving there, to our surprise,no one was there. Why? Where were they?
Maybe the activity was not here. Maybe the activity would not hold today.
I wanted to call someone to ask about it. What a shame! I have just got a new cellphone and have not input my contacts. I could only remember phone numbers of my family. I could not think of the others.
Suddenly, I thought of my friends usually using QQ. I started to download the software from the internet at once. After it finished, I connected to QQ and sent a message to my friend. Two seconds later, I received a reply of a place change. When we found the place, the activity has aleady begun for 20 minutes.
Goodness! Anything can happen to me.

 
Mar 12, 2012 00:56 Xu Zhehao/ Joon-Hyuk Lee
  • this is the way an american would say it haha kind of silly but your english is almost perfect. so good :D

 
Mar 12, 2012 16:28 lxf
  • Xu Zhehao, thanks for your comment. Have a nice day!
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