Mary was selfish and alone because her parents died. She came to her uncle’s house, where she makes friends for the first time. That makes her healthier and nicer. One day she found a secret garden, and she began to plant and play in it. Meanwhile, Colin, her cousin, was also selfish and ill. But with her help, he was getting better and better. At last, when Colin’s father saw him, he was touched that his son seemed so happy.(80)
The good point of this book is that I could see two selfish children changed to be agreeable. And this had a great influence on Colin’s father, who was always in gloom, to change to be happy. Happy ending made me also happy, so I like such a lovely story.(50)
She came to her uncle’s house, where she made a friend for the first time.
That made her healthier and nicer.
Meanwhile, Colin, her cousin, was also selfish and ill.
"Meanwhile" is clear from the other words in the sentence (and the next sentence), so it's a bit redundant.
A good theme in this book is that two selfish children became agreeable.
And this had a great influence on Colin’s father, who had always been gloomy and became happy in the end.
The happy ending made me glad; I enjoyed such a lovely story.(50)
Actually I don't decide yet.
So I want to touch many world in university.