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Dec 2, 2009 00:08

I haven't written a dialy for a long time, and I haven't replyed to many massage. I'm sorry!! But now I have to study for my test, so this weekend I reply massage!! Please waite for me><

The day after tomorrow, I have to write a essay at the test, so please correct it.
The theme is responsibility.

If you have a boy friend who has a fatal disease and if only you know the fact, how do you behave in front of him? If he ask you to take him to the amusement park in spite of the danger of going there. Beside you know his parents expect him to stay at home and to spend with him in the rest of his time. Then what do you do? I’m going to take him to the amusement park if he really hopes for it, because that’s all I can do for him. When you are at a loss, you should do something you can. I think it is very difficult to think about responsibility for people so I think if you consider it hard then you will find an answer, and you find an answer, you will be allowed to believe that it is best your choosing. After all, you have to have own responsibility, but it is difficult to find answer what is the best in case of others.

If you fined the sentence, please erase, because it is too much.

wulvie

Dec 2, 2009 00:36

I haven't written a dialy for a long time, and I haven't replyed to many massage.
I haven't written a diary for a long time, and I haven't replied to the many messages.

But now I have to study for my test, so this weekend I reply massage!!
But now I have to study for my test, so this weekend, I will reply to the messages!!

Please waite for me><
Please waite for me><

The day after tomorrow, I have to write a essay at the test, so please correct it.
The day after tomorrow, I have to write an essay at for the test, so please correct it. (You will use at when you are referring to a location or time.)

If you have a boy friend who has a fatal disease and if only you know the fact, how do you behave in front of him?
If you have a boyfriend who has a fatal disease and if only you know the fact, how do will you behave in front of him?

If he ask you to take him to the amusement park in spite of the danger of going there.
If he asks you to take him to the amusement park in despite of the danger of going there. (This sentence is hanging. It is a fragment. It doesn't make sense at all. Try to add a corresponding subject in this sentence.)

Beside you know his parents expect him to stay at home and to spend with him in the rest of his time.
Besides you know his parents expect him to stay at home and to spend with him in the rest of his time with him.

Then what do you do?
Then what do will you do? (This is just mere たとえば, so you should use the future tense, will. Shall is also appropriate.)

When you are at a loss, you should do something you can.
When you are at a loss, you should do something that you can.

I think it is very difficult to think about responsibility for people so I think if you consider it hard then you will find an answer, and you find an answer, you will be allowed to believe that it is best your choosing.
I think it is very difficult to think about responsibility for people so I think if you consider it hard then you will find an answer, and you find an answer, where you will be allowed to believe that it is best your best choice choosing. (It's too wordy.)

After all, you have to have own responsibility, but it is difficult to find answer what is the best in case of others.
After all, you have to take your have own responsibilities, but it is difficult to find the answer when you want the what is the best for in case of others. (I didn't understand your sentence.)

If you fined the sentence, please erase, because it is too much.
If you find the sentence, please erase, because it is too much. (Ha?)

I remember one of the dramas by Nishikido Ryo, entitled "にいにのことを忘れないで". It is really dramatic, because I found myself in the protagonist's shoes. As a matter of fact, I cried several times, while watching that drama. Try to watch it if you have time.

Thank you for your correction!