I walked with my dog. 私は犬と一緒に散歩しました。

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Sep 3, 2011 15:50
It is sometimes fine today in Yamaguchi.
今日は、山口はときどき晴れでした。

My dog is labrador　Retriever.
私の犬はラブラドールレトリーバーです。

I love dogs!
私は犬が大好きです。

She is 10 years old.
彼女は10歳です。

I always walk half of an hour.
いつも30分ぐらい歩きます。

My dog tired early.
うちの犬は疲れるのが早いです。

I'm worrying.
心配しています。

I have grown a Japanese midget Shiba　before.
以前、Japanese midget Shiba（柴犬）を育てたことがあります。

She was dead 16 years old.
16歳で死んでしまいました。

I hope good health.
私は犬が健康であることが願いです。

But Appetite is very good.
でも、食欲だけはとてもあります＾＾



sail
Thank you for your correction!
Sep 3, 2011 16:00
  • It is sometimes fine today in Yamaguchi.

  • It was partially sunny today in Yamaguchi.

 
  • I always walk half of an hour.

  • I always walk for half an hour.

 
  • My dog tired early.

  • My dog gets tired early.

 
  • I have grown a Japanese midget Shiba　before.

  • I have raised a Japanese midget Shiba before.

 
  • She was dead 16 years old.

  • She when she was 16.

 
  • I hope good health.

  • I hope my dog has good health. I hope my dog is healthy. (<-- Sounds more natural.)

 
  • But Appetite is very good.

  • But it's appetite is very good.

 

In the US we just call those dogs Shiba Inu, I think. :) I hope your dog stays healthy, too.

Sep 3, 2011 16:43 Nirvash
ネットの翻訳で柴犬を調べてみたら、Japanese midget Shibaとなったので、こちらを書きました。Shiba　Inuで通じるのですね。わかりました。
添削ありがとうございました。

Thanks for your comments.

Sep 4, 2011 13:30

  • She when she was 16.

She died when she was 16 years old.

Sep 4, 2011 14:10 Nirvash
Thank you.I　understand.
Kate
Thank you for your correction!
Sep 4, 2011 23:52
  • It is sometimes fine today in Yamaguchi.

  • It is partially sunny today in Yamaguchi.

 
  • My dog is labrador　Retriever.

  • My dog is a Labrador Retriever.

 
  • She is 10 years old.

  • My dog is a female, and she is 10 years old. (who is "she" referring to? :)

 
  • I always walk half of an hour.

  • I always walk her for half an hour.

 
  • My dog tired early.

  • My dog gets tired early.

 
  • I'm worrying.

  • I'm starting to worry.

 
  • I have grown a Japanese midget Shiba　before.

  • I have raised a Japanese miniature Shiba before.

 
  • She was dead 16 years old.

  • She died when she was 16 years old.

 
  • I hope good health.

  • I hope my dog will have good health.

 
  • But Appetite is very good.

  • However, her appetite is very good. (it's tempting, but try not to start a sentence with "but" :)

 

Nice job!
Mostly corrected you on making your journal sound more natural :).
Also, try not to start with the word "but" in a sentence, in this case, you can use "Also," or "However,".
Hope that helped.
がんばって！

Sep 5, 2011 10:10 Nirvash
Thank you for the corrections!
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