my English learning experience( who can help me to correct my grammar!!! in hurry !~!!!!)

Recently I asked myself why I chose to learn English, not Korean, Spanish or any other language after I finished all the Japanese classes.

At the beginning I just didn’t want to give up the language which I have been learning almost 10 years, but recently I found it was more than that.

For some people English means class, a good job, or studying overseas. But for me, English encompassed a lot memories.

During my childhood, English meant watching movies.

I started learning English formally in primary school, but my first contact with English was through American action movies before I even went to the school because my father likes them very much.

Although I was very young at the time, I still remember how we always spent time watching American action movies during the weekend.

Maybe deep inside, I am not a quiet girl; I love American action movies more than my father, although at the time I couldn’t understand what the actors were talking about or read the Chinese subtitles, but I still kept watching and watching.

Furthermore, I found English sounds to be beautiful.

So after that, although my junior high school English teacher used inhumane methods for teaching English including dictation tests, punishments of copying the vocabulary list and text, make-up classes, made phone call to your parents, extra homework, etc... she gave me a headache, but I never thought of giving up English.

The memory of watching English movies is my most valuable asset; I will never forget it.

In high school, English was my good friend.

My first time talking with a foreigner was in my high school, a foreign language school with my foreign English teacher.

Each class was divided into 2 groups; each group had their own foreign English teacher and we had an oral English class once a week.

The rest of the time we were still taught by Chinese teachers.

My foreign English teacher was from America, liked alcohol, and had a Chinese girlfriend. We called him Sam.

Every day he looked like a drunk, but from talking to him, you knew he was not drunk.

But he really drank a lot.

He gave us a sex education lecture (because this is a very sensitive topic in China, there is no lecture about this topic); showed us the beer bottles he collected, and furthermore, he once mentioned a quarrel with his girlfriend when he was too sad to control himself and even cried in front of us.

But the summer I graduated from high school, a lot of things happened.

I heard Sam died from acute heart disease.

It was so sudden, I didn't even have time to say goodbye to him.

But this is life; you never know what will happen in the next second.

Anyway I really enjoyed that time. If I had a time machine, I would go back again.

In university, English was a world ticket.

My first time hearing that Taiwan shouldn’t belong to China was from a Korean guy in APU.

And both of us used our poor English to try to convince each other for the whole night.

Before that the education I received in China was unilateral.

No newspaper, no media can publish the article about anything against the unity of motherland. The people who supported Taiwanese independence should be punished, and I naively believe that everyone ought to support China, but after that night I found the world was much more complicated than I imagined.

And this is the world which I really want know.

Then I started on my journey.

I went to Hawaii where the native Hawaiian people taught me Hawaiian language and culture. In Thailand and my Thai friend told me a lot of things about Simon. In Singapore, the law and police there left in me a deep impression. In Malaysia, Muslim people’s lives shocked me, and I still can’t accept it now ……English like a ticket, make me able to talk with people of different nationalities, go to different countries, experience different lives, and listen to different opinions and reevaluate mine.

And all of these memories were facilitated by knowing English.

For some people English means class, a good job, or overseas study, but for me, English is a container of my memory.

It encompasses my childhood cinematic experience, making good friends, my journey throughout the world, and I will step into the future with these memories.

Without English as the container, I don’t know where I would put my memories.

Like the native Hawaiian people said: people should look at the past and move ahead.

Recently I asked myself, why I choose chose to (past tense) learn English, not choose (choose is unnecessary here, and it sounds more natural without it ^_^) Korean, Spanish, or other another languages after I finished all the Japanese classes.

At the beginning, I just didn’t want to give up the thing which I have been learned learning near for almost 10years, but recently I find ('realized' would sound more natural, or 'found', which is past tense) it is more than that.

For some people English means class, for some people English means a good job, for some people English means overseas study, but for me English means a container of memory. (I'm not sure of your meaning here, but if you are trying to say you have memories contained in the English language, it may be more accurate to say, "for me English means memories", or something similar.

I started to learn English from primary school, but my first time contact with English is was through American action movies before I went to the school, because my father likes them very much.

Although at that time I was very young, I still remember we always spent time on watching American action movies in on the weekend.

Maybe in my deep side deep down (would sound better) I am not a quiet girl, because I love American action movies more than my father, although that time back then I can’t couldn't understand what did the actors talked about, and or what the Chinese subtitle’s (here, you either want to say "or the Chinese subtitles' meaning" or "or what the Chinese subtitles meant) meaning, I still kept watching and watching.

Furthermore, I fund think English is beautiful, sounds beautiful, just I I just like it.

So after that, although my junior high school English teacher with had an inhuman methods way of teaching English: (you want a colon here because you are starting a list of things the teacher did) dictation test, punishment of for copying the vocabulary list and text, make made up class, made phone calls to your parents, extra homework … she made gave me headaches, but I never thought of giving up English.

The memory about the movie time is my most valuable assets. (period here, because these are two separate thoughts. If you want to use a comma, there has to be an 'and' before 'I will never forget it'. Also, 'asset' is a single thing, because it is referring to 'memory') I will never forget it.

My first time talking with a foreigner was in my high school, in a foreign language school with my foreign English teacher.

Every class was divided into 2 groups; every group has had their own foreign English teacher and we had this oral English class once a week.

But other time (other classes?) were still taught by Chinese teachers.

My foreign English teacher was from American, liked alcohol, and had a Chinese girlfriend. We called him Sam.

Every day he looked like a drunk, but from the conversation, you could find tell that he was not drunk.

He gave us a sex education lecture (because this is a very sensitive topic in china, there is no lecture about this topic); showed the beer bottle he collected; furthermore, once he mentioned a quarrel with his girlfriend, and he was too sad to control himself. He even cried in front of us.

But the summer I graduated from high school, there were a lot of things that happened.

It was so suddenly, even I haven’t I hadn't even had time to say goodbye to him.

But this is life: (you are telling something about life, in two complete sentences, so a colon is better) you never can know what will happen in the next second.

Anyway I really enjoyed that time. If I have had (This is not 'past tense', however you are presenting a theoretical situation so the past tense is used.) a time machine, I really want would like to go back again.

My The first time I heard that Taiwan shouldn’t belong to China was from a Korean guy in APU.

And both of us used our poor English tried to try to convince each other for the whole night.

Before that, the education I received in china was unilateral. (I like this word: unilateral. You taught me a new word in English, and English is my native language! ^.^)

No newspaper, no media can publish the article about an article against the unity of motherland. The people who support Taiwan independence should be punished, and I naively believe that everyone ought to support China, but after that night I fund found the world is much more complicated than I imagined.

And this is the really world, which I want to know.

I went to Hawaii, the native Hawaiian people taught me Hawaiian language and culture; I went to Thailand, my Thailand friend told me a lot of things about Simon; I went to Singapore, the law and police there left me a deep impression on me; I went to Malaysia, Muslim’s life shocked me, and I still can’t receive (I don't quite understand your usage of 'receive' here. Do you mean you couldn't relate to their customs? If so, this would say "I still can't relate to it even now") now ……English is like a ticket, it makes me able to talk with different people from different countries, go to different countries, experience different lives, listen to different opinions, and then struggle with mines.

And all of these memories are contained by within English.

For some people English means class, for some people English means a good job, for some people English means overseas study, but for me English means a container of my memory. (the same thing as the last time you used this sentence: Maybe you could also use, "for me English is the language in which I hold many of my memories")

It contained is a reminder of (I honestly am not sure of the best word to use in this context, but this is another option that would sound better. You cannot fluently use 'contain' because although yes, your memories are contained in English, it is not 'proper' to say so. It just doesn't flow right.) my movie time, contained my good friend, contained my journey, and I will go ahead with this.

Without English, the container, I don’t know where what I can put my memory in. But 'contain' does sound right here! You are identifying that English is a container, therefore your usage of 'contain' in the previous sentences makes sense. Maybe work this into this essay earlier, and your other usages of 'contain' will then be okay. Unnatural usage of a word is sometimes okay if, like here, you define what you mean by this. Does that make sense? Sorry, I'm new at this ^_^

Like the native Hawaiian people said: people should look at the? past, and? move ahead.

Recently I asked myself, why did I choose to learn English and not choose Korean, Spanish, or any other language after I finished all the Japanese classes. I'm not sure what you are referring to here; are you saying you asked yourself this question after you finished you Japanese classes, or are you saying that you are asking yourself why didn't you choose to learn a different language after you took your Japanese classes (as in a long time ago)?

At the beginning I just didn’t want to give up the thing which I have been learning for nearly 10 years, but recently I find it more than that.

For some people English means class, for some people English means a good job, for some people English means oversea study, but for me English means a container of memory. Doesn't sound natural here; try rewording it.

I started to learn English in primarily school, but the first time I can in contact with English was through American action movies I saw before I went to the school. I watched them because my father likes them very much a lot. This sentence is a run-on; it has to be split up.

Although at that time I was very young, I still remember we always spending time on watching American action movies on the weekends.

Maybe deep inside I am not a quiet girl; I love American action movies more than my father. Although at that time I couldn't understand what did the actors were talking about and what the Chinese subtitles were saying, I still kept watching and watching. This sentence is a run-on, it needs to be split up.

Furthermore, I found out that English is beautiful and sounds beautiful. just I like it. Doesn't sound natural here.

So after that, although my junior high school English teacher used inhuman methods ways of teaching English like dictation tests, punishment of copy the vocabulary list and text (I can't tell what you mean here), make-up classes, made phone calls to your parents, extra homework … (she gave me a headache), but I never thought of giving up English.

The memories of watching the movies are my most valuable assets that I will never forget it.

My first time talking with a foreigner was in my high school during a foreign language course with my foreign English teacher.

Every class was divided into two (I think the rule is to spell out numbers under 10 in sentences) groups; every group had their own foreign English teacher, and we had this oral English class once a week.

But (Rule in proper English: don't start a sentence with 'but' or 'and') the rest of the time we were still taught by Chinese teachers.

My foreign English teacher was from American, liked alcohol, and had a Chinese girlfriend. We called him Sam.

Every day he looked like a drunk, but from the conversation if you talked to him, you could find see that he was not drunk.

But He really did drink a lot, however.

He gave us a sex education lecture (because this is a very sensitive topic in China, so there is no lecture about this topic in school); showed the beer bottles he collected, and he even once mentioned a quarrel he had with his girlfriend. He was too sad to control himself, and he even cried right (sounds natural) in front of us.

But the summer I graduated from high school, there were a lot of things happened.

It was so suddenly; even I didn’t have the time to say goodbye to him.

But this is life; you never can know what will happen in the next second.

Anyway I really enjoyed that time; if I had a time machine, I would really want to go back again.

My first time I heard that Taiwan shouldn’t belong to China was from a Korean guy in APU.

And both of us (with our poor English skills) tried to talk to each other for the whole night.

Before that the education I received in China was unilateral.

Newspapers and the media can't publish an article about against the unity of the (I'm not sure if the 'the' is needed) motherland, the people who support Taiwan independence would be are (you use present tense since people can still be punished today) punished, and back then I naively believed that everyone ought to support China. but After that night I found out that the world is much more complicated than I imaged thought (sounds more natural). (At the very end the sentence is a run-on)

And this is the real world which I want know. I want to know what the real world is like. (This is the only fix I could think of)

I went to Hawaii where the native Hawaii people taught me the Hawaii language and culture. I went to Thailand where my Thailand friend told me a lot of things about Simon. I went to Singapore. The law and police there left me a deep impression. I went to Malaysia where Muslim life shocked me, and I still can’t understand it now …English is like a ticket; it makes me able to talk with different people from different countries, go to different countries to experience different lives (cultures might be better here), and listen to different opinions that disagree with mine. (or 'listen to different opinions that make me reconsider mine', it depends what you are saying) (This sentence had too many independent clauses and was a run-on.)

And all of these memories are because of English.

For some people English means class, for some people English means good job, for some people English means oversea study, but for me English means a container of my memory. (I don't understand what you are saying)

It let me enjoy my movie time, talk to my good friend, go on my journey, and I will go ahead with them. (Go ahead with what?)

Without English, the container, I don’t know where I would get my memories from.

Like the native Hawaii people say: people should look at past and move ahead.