The Script of Mid-Term Report 3

I'd he happy if you could correct it and give me some advice,

more natural word order

I'd like to show you one more of our systematic activities.

It's the monitoring of teachers who work with Japanese volunteers.

The purpose of this monitoring is to determine the effect of the Japanese volunteers' support.

Every term, teachers must show how they have developed their teaching skills through their work with the Japanese volunteers.

After that, the head teacher, the Zone Curriculum Adviser (ZCA), the Provincial Education Officer (PEO), and the Ministry of Education (MOE) read the teachers' answers and provide some comments by turns as feedback.

"Part 3, Future activities" In this part, I'd like to talk about my ideas concerning our future activities.

(pause) I think that unfortunately we can't say "yes." There are a lot of reasons: delays, lack of reports, shortness of manpower, or management problems.

Consequently, I have to think about what I should do as a Japanese program officer in the second half of my time here.

Reports and discussions, appeals, learning people's opinions or points of view.

I think that the MOE needs to provide a lot of information concerning education in Vanuatu.

We can use various forms of media: radio, television, or newspaper.

One month ago, we had an interview about "100math" with the Radio Vanuatu.

In the mean time, I will continue to issue a newsletter for Japanese volunteers every two weeks.

fortnight is not used in North American English at all. I would say the majority of people here have no idea how long a fortnight is.

(I'll show the newsletter) This "MOE Fortnightly" shows the information of the MOE and various Japanese volunteer's activities.

It might be better for us to let the MOE know more about the Japanese volunteer's activities.

In addition, it's essential for the MOE, the Provincial Education Officer, and the Zone Curriculum Advisers to inform schools or local people about what the MOE is trying to do.

I'm sure that these activities will heighten/increase people's interest in education in Vanuatu.

I've ever heard Hillary Clinton's quote, like "All village people must raise their children." We should make such an educational situation.

This quote sounds a bit odd. I would check the exact wording.

And to do so, we need the heightened citizen's interest in education and a sense that everyone is responsible for raising every child in their region.

'every' requires a singular noun

I'd like to assist in increasing their interest in education.

Lastly, I'd like to share one more of my ideas with you.

We have a possibility to report and show our achievements.

Furthermore, we can discuss the future with the MOE.

Along with the MOE and the Japanese volunteers, we have a fundamental need to work together systematically.

Next, I think that I should show the MOE our ideas and our achievements.

By doing so, I'm sure that we will be able to work together based on mutual respect and trust.

I'M going to continue my efforts in Vanuatu until I go back to Japan 10 months from now.

Please keep giving me your support and helpful advice.

I'm going to practice for this presentation in about a month.

Different meanings - both correct

I'd like to show you one more systematic activity of ourselves.

That's the monitoring of the teachers who work with Japanese volunteers.

The purpose of this monitoring is to know the effect of the Japanese volunteers' support.

After that, the head teacher, Zone Curriculum Adviser (ZCA), Provincial Education Officer (PEO), and the Ministry of Education (MOE) read their answers and wrote some comments in turn as feedback.

You should start each title with "the". eg. The Zone Curriculum Adviser.
However, as long as the first title (head teacher) has a "the", it can be assumed in the other titles too.
(Sorry - this is hard to explain)

"Part 3, Future activities" In this part, I'd like to mention as to my ideas concerning our future activities.

(pause) I think that unfortunately we can't say "yes." There are a lot of reasons including delays, lack of reports, being short of manpower, or management problems.

Consequently, I have to think about what I should do as a Japanese program officer in my second half of the activity.

Reports and discussions, appeals, knowing people's opinion or consciousness...

I think that MOE needs to provide a lot of information concerning education in Vanuatu.

We can use various types of media [including/such as] radio, television, or newspaper.

One month ago, we had an interview regarding/about "100math" with the Radio Vanuatu.

If you wanted to use 'the', you would write it like this: "with the Vanuatu Radio".

Meanwhile, I will continue to issue one newsletters for Japanese volunteers every fortnight.

According to the other corrector, 'fortnight' is not used in North America. I had no idea!
In the UK, it's very common and everyone knows what it means.

In addition, it's essential for the MOE, Provincial Education Officer, and Zone Curriculum Advisers to inform schools or local people about what MOE is trying to do.

I've ever heard Hillary Clinton's quote, like "All village people must raise their children." We should make such an educational situation.

Lastly, I'd like to show you my one more idea.

Furthermore, we can discuss the future with MOE.

We, the MOE and Japanese volunteers, have a fundamental need to work together systematically.

I'M going to keep making an effort in Vanuatu until I go back to Japan 10 months later.