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May 28, 2012 06:27
I was taking photos on a road.  Someone behind me asked me what I was taking.  It was natural that he wonder what I was doing because my camera faced empty sky.  I answered that I was taking vapor tails on the sky.  There are many vapor tails on the sky in London.  It is beautiful for me and I love seeing it.  Recently, the wether getting better and I often see them.  I'm happy to see them.
Mel
Thank you for your correction!
May 28, 2012 06:35
  •  Someone behind me asked me what I was taking.

  • Someone behind me asked me what I was doing.

 
  •  It was natural that he wonder what I was doing because my camera faced empty sky.

  • It was natural that he wonder what I was doing because my camera faced empty sky.

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  •  I answered that I was taking vapor tails on the sky.

  • I answered that I was taking photos of vapor tails in the sky.

 
  •  There are many vapor tails on the sky in London.

  • There are many vapor tails in the London sky.

 
  •  Recently, the wether getting better and I often see them.

  • Recently, the weather has been getting better and I often see them.

 

Good overall grammar, just some awkward wording.

May 29, 2012 04:38 astro_yoshi
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