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Socky
  • I wondered if there was a lawmaker who expressed his or her joy without Banzai, while watching the TV news about the election.
  • While watching the TV news about the election, I wondered if there was a lawmaker who expressed his or her joy without using Banzai.
  • "While watching the TV news about the election" is what is called a "prepositional phrase" and it mostly comes either directly before or directly after the subject of a sentence. Sentence order: SUBJECT, PREPOSITIONAL PHRASE, VERB or PREPOSITIONAL PHRASE, SUBJECT, VERB. Example: "At home, Bob walked." "At home" is the prepositional phrase. "Bob" is the subject. "Walked" is the verb. Another example: "Bob, who was 7 years old, had no money." Bob= subject who was 7 years old = prepositional phrase had = verb Don't worry about remembering exactly what a "prepositional phrase" is. Just know the correct order of a sentence :)

Jul 24, 2013 03:29 Public Banzai
Socky
  • Japanese people did "Banzai" often in order to share a joy, which they get with their efforts, with their relevant people.
  • Japanese people did "Banzai" often in order to share a joy, which they get obtain with their efforts, with their relevant people the other people involved.
  • "Get joy" sounds a little strange. I think "obtain joy" is better, but "get joy" is correct anyway. "Relevant people" is also strange because "relevant" usually refers to speech and not objects. Example: "This is not a relevant conversation."

Jul 24, 2013 03:29 Public Banzai
Paula
  • We learn a full-fledged summer starts in Los Angeles by the end of jacaranda flowers.
  • We learn a fFull-fledged summer starts in Los Angeles signalled by the end of jacaranda flowers.
  • This sentence could go in two directions. I think you are aiming at the end of spring and beginning of summer is indicated by the fall of the flowers.

Jul 16, 2013 19:40 Public Jacaranda
Paula
  • The beautiful purple flowers, which go well with Californian blue sky, make my eyes enjoyed for two months.
  • I enjoyed tThe sight of the beautiful purple flowers, which go well with Californian blue sky, make my eyes enjoyed for two months.
  • Enjoyed isn't quite right here. You enjoyed a sight, your eyes didn't. Usually when we refer to our eyes it is the physical only, your vision or sight can be enjoyed or you can enjoy.

Jul 16, 2013 19:39 Public Jacaranda
Paula
  • The all flowers of a jacaranda tree in front of my house have finally fallen down.
  • All tThe all flowers of thea jacaranda tree in front of my house have finally fallen down.
  • All of the flowers would also work. If there is only one jacaranda tree then it is a definitive the instead of a random a.

Jul 16, 2013 19:39 Public Jacaranda
BrusselSprout
  • The hotel guests enjoy relaxing in the comfortable atmosphere.
  • The hotel guests enjoy relaxationg in the comfortable atmosphere.
  • "Relaxing" sounds very strong and immediate. As in, 'they are enjoying it right now!', where as the noun makes it more general

Jul 12, 2013 20:25 Public Terranea Resort
BrusselSprout
  • I ate a dish of fish, which was really good taste.
  • I ate a dish of fish, which wtasted really good taste.
  • When describing a specific object you can't say it "was a -noun-". Instead it's "past tense verb -abjective"

Jul 12, 2013 20:25 Public Terranea Resort
egmont
  • The price of the package tour used to be cheaper than the total price of those three items, which the consumer purchased by themselves, because the supplyers gave us a good rate to compose the package tour.
  • The price of the package tour used to be cheaper than the total price of those three items compared to when the consumer purchased them individually, because the suppliers gave us a good rate to compose the package tour.

Jul 10, 2013 21:52 Public Package Tour
squidlydeux
  • Whenever I went to Nagoya for my business or she came to Kansai, we met and talked a lot about many things from business to private.
  • Whenever I went to Nagoya for my on business or she came to Kansai, we met and talked a lot about many things from business to private personal.

Jul 7, 2013 21:10 Public Long Time No See
squidlydeux
  • Yesterday, I was happy to have received an email from my friend, whom I hadn’t contacted since I moved to the US.
  • Yesterday, I was happy to have received an email from my friend, whom I hadn't contacted haven't been in contact with since I moved moving to the US.
  • The original was okay. This sounds more natural.

Jul 7, 2013 21:09 Public Long Time No See

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