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Paula
  • We learn a full-fledged summer starts in Los Angeles by the end of jacaranda flowers.
  • We learn a fFull-fledged summer starts in Los Angeles signalled by the end of jacaranda flowers.
  • This sentence could go in two directions. I think you are aiming at the end of spring and beginning of summer is indicated by the fall of the flowers.

Jul 16, 2013 19:40 Public Jacaranda
Paula
  • The beautiful purple flowers, which go well with Californian blue sky, make my eyes enjoyed for two months.
  • I enjoyed tThe sight of the beautiful purple flowers, which go well with Californian blue sky, make my eyes enjoyed for two months.
  • Enjoyed isn't quite right here. You enjoyed a sight, your eyes didn't. Usually when we refer to our eyes it is the physical only, your vision or sight can be enjoyed or you can enjoy.

Jul 16, 2013 19:39 Public Jacaranda
Paula
  • The all flowers of a jacaranda tree in front of my house have finally fallen down.
  • All tThe all flowers of thea jacaranda tree in front of my house have finally fallen down.
  • All of the flowers would also work. If there is only one jacaranda tree then it is a definitive the instead of a random a.

Jul 16, 2013 19:39 Public Jacaranda
BrusselSprout
  • The hotel guests enjoy relaxing in the comfortable atmosphere.
  • The hotel guests enjoy relaxationg in the comfortable atmosphere.
  • "Relaxing" sounds very strong and immediate. As in, 'they are enjoying it right now!', where as the noun makes it more general

Jul 12, 2013 20:25 Public Terranea Resort
BrusselSprout
  • I ate a dish of fish, which was really good taste.
  • I ate a dish of fish, which wtasted really good taste.
  • When describing a specific object you can't say it "was a -noun-". Instead it's "past tense verb -abjective"

Jul 12, 2013 20:25 Public Terranea Resort
egmont
  • The price of the package tour used to be cheaper than the total price of those three items, which the consumer purchased by themselves, because the supplyers gave us a good rate to compose the package tour.
  • The price of the package tour used to be cheaper than the total price of those three items compared to when the consumer purchased them individually, because the suppliers gave us a good rate to compose the package tour.

Jul 10, 2013 21:52 Public Package Tour
squidlydeux
  • Whenever I went to Nagoya for my business or she came to Kansai, we met and talked a lot about many things from business to private.
  • Whenever I went to Nagoya for my on business or she came to Kansai, we met and talked a lot about many things from business to private personal.

Jul 7, 2013 21:10 Public Long Time No See
squidlydeux
  • Yesterday, I was happy to have received an email from my friend, whom I hadn’t contacted since I moved to the US.
  • Yesterday, I was happy to have received an email from my friend, whom I hadn't contacted haven't been in contact with since I moved moving to the US.
  • The original was okay. This sounds more natural.

Jul 7, 2013 21:09 Public Long Time No See
Lindsay
  • I was surprised that such a vulgar TV program was on air during daytime, although I didn’t understand the program well because of many slang.
  • I was surprised that such a vulgar TV program was on air during the daytime, although I didn’t understand the program well because of many all the slang.
  • "because of all the ~" is a common English phrase. It has a nuance of 〜のせいで

Jul 7, 2013 19:45 Public Jerry Springer Show
egmont
  • He was full of confident and behaved with dignity although there were some people who told that he was arrogant behind him.
  • He was full of confidence and behaved with dignity, although there were some people who said that he was arrogant behind his back.
  • "Told" is a transitive verb, it needs an object--told someone or told something. Example: "Later, he told his friend that the manager was arrogant," or "the workers told each other that he was arrogant."

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