The Most Advanced Barrier Free Country
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The US is the most advanced barrier free country.
People who use wheelchairs can live more conveniently than any other countries.
It could be a point to attract travelers who have difficulties in their walking.
In Japan, the number of people who couldn’t walk by themselves because the number of old people is increasing.
The US is losing popularity among Japanese tourists in general.
I try to motivate senior tourists in Japan to come to the US by appealing the advanced barrier free facilities in the US.
People who use wheelchairs can live more conveniently than any other countries.
It could be a point to attract travelers who have difficulties in their walking.
In Japan, the number of people who couldn’t walk by themselves because the number of old people is increasing.
The US is losing popularity among Japanese tourists in general.
I try to motivate senior tourists in Japan to come to the US by appealing the advanced barrier free facilities in the US.
People who use wheelchairs can live more conveniently than any other country.
You would just use the word "country" to describe the US since your just talking about one country and not multiples (countries)other than that good job.
It could be a point to attract travelers who have difficulty in their walking.
the coss outs could still be used in this sentence but it may sound odd to some folks who seak English. Also I highlighted difficulty in red to let you know what I thought may sound a little more smooth.
In Japan, the number of people who can't walk by themselves is increasing. Because the number of elderly is going up.
The words that are marked in red are what would sound better if spoken in English
Blue letters would be a small fix
The US is losing it's popularity among many Japanese tourists in general.
just a small addition to your sentence to make it a little more clear as a statement.
I try to motivate senior tourists in Japan to come to America, by appealing the advanced barrier free facilities of the US.
just two small corrections. The "US" was a little over used. So I just switched one up and made it America instead. Also I switched the word "in" to "of". Just to give it that little extra kick lol.
People who use wheelchairs can live more conveniently in the US than in any other country.
The US is losing its popularity among Japanese tourists in general.
I'm correcting the correction! Many native speakers of English get "it's" wrong. http://theoatmeal.com/comics/apostrophe