Email to the Hotel

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May 22, 2012 11:10
I’m planning my family tour to Palm Springs this weekend.
My boss recommended and booked a hotel through the GM of the hotel who he knows well.
I wrote an email to the GM as follows;
“Hello -----san,
Thank you for your kind offer despite busy weekend.
I would like to stay at your hotel as your offer.
I have never been to your great resort, although I have heard of good reputations from many of my colleagues.
We are group of four including my wife, 7years old son and 2years old son who doesn't need a bed.
We will stay on 27th May for 1night and check in at around 17:00.
I’m looking forward to staying at your hotel.
Sincerely yours,”
Are there something strange expressions?