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臭豆腐
  • I could hear a strange sound came from my neck clearly.
  • I could hear a strange sound (that) came from my neck clearly.
  • I would move the word “clearly”: I could clearly hear a strange sound that came from my neck. -or- I could hear a strange sound that clearly came from my neck.
I would move the word “clearly”:

I could clearly hear a strange sound that came from my neck.

-or-

I could hear a strange sound that clearly came from my neck.

Oct 10, 2018 07:27 Public Day 2 (revised)
spcartman
Either the original entry has been deleted or you don't have access to it.

Dec 19, 2016 11:28 Public 最近读的书
Tranquil Toad
  • In the face of it, they may lose some money as the reasonable concern of customers’ self-disciplines.
  • In the face of it, they may lose some money as the reasonable concern due to the potential for customers to lack self-discipline.
  • Your sentence reads as if they will lose some money because of their concern, instead of it being because of the customer's self-discipline.

Dec 12, 2016 20:31 Public An unknown to public breakf...
老李
  • Ren Yongyang, a 23 years old car-rescue team leader, set up a charitable organization, known as “Beijing Warm Heart Rescuers,” which has been hoovering up 2,000 members since 2014.
  • Ren Yongyang, a 23 years old car-rescue team leader, set up a charitable organization, known as “Beijing Warm Heart Rescuers,” which has been hoovering up [gathered/recruited] 2,000 members since 2014.
  • "Hoovering up" is not typically used when talking with people but even if you did, it couldn't be used with a specific number. For example, you could write "The company has been hoovering up money since 2014." but *not* "The company has been hoovering up $20 million since 2014." The latter sentence would imply that the company received $20 million (all in the year 2014) and has been cleaning it with a vacuum cleaner (hoovering up) ever since.

Dec 10, 2016 23:05 Public Ren Yongyang, a 23 years ol...
metacake
  • I prefer nature views with green color, which I assume should be benefit for my eyes, and also the beach sight with cliffs and ocean in twilight.
  • I prefer views of nature that are green in color, which I assume should be beneficial for my eyes, as well as wallpapers of beaches with cliffs and oceans in twilight. beach sight with cliffs and ocean in twilight.
Mario
  • Even though I’m not a big fan of love story, a brilliant successful business man with an attracting sense of humor, turning his foe in professional, whom is beautiful but blunt in love, into his lifelong companion, has totally engrossed me.
  • Even though I’m not a big fan of the soap opera love story,but a brilliant and also a successful business man with the an attracting sense of humor, who first engages with his beautiful female business professional as a foe , then as time goes by, this blunt lady with a heart of ice is also attracted to him, and finally with his honest approach to her, her heart is melted with his persistence, turning turning his foe in professional, whom is beautiful but blunt in love, into his lifelong companion. This sequence of chain reaction has totally engrossed me.

Nov 29, 2016 18:49 Public You've Got Mail
Cayjay
  • But now days, with lots of personal information and connecting accounts in it, we will be facing a mess, and worrying about the possibilities that our money in the bank would disappear in any second.
  • But nowadays, with lots of personal information and connecting accounts on it, we would be facing a mess, and worrying about the possibilities that our money in the bank would disappear in any second.
  • The word "nowadays" might seem strange but it is used a lot casually.

Nov 25, 2016 14:58 Public Booking a ticket
Cayjay
  • In the past, if we lost a mobile phone, we only need to get a new one.
  • In the past, if we lost a mobile phone, we only needed to get a new one.

Nov 25, 2016 14:57 Public Booking a ticket
Emma
  • The ingredients of the sauce usually including sesame paste, fermented bean curds and caraways.
  • The ingredients of the sauce usually include sesame paste, fermented bean curds and caraways.
  • I think you mean cilantro here, not caraways.

Nov 25, 2016 10:46 Public Hotpot
Artemis
  • Each time they thought about their treasured home had been deprived by the enemies, they would burst into tears.
  • Each time they thought about their treasured home that they had been deprived of by the enemies, they would burst into tears.

Nov 22, 2016 17:23 Public An Ancient Chinese Story

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