25/12/10 - Hot Christmas

I bet so many people are at the beach.

My roommate went to the beach but I didn't go with them for some reason,

(I mean I couldn't meet the owner of the two rooms)

I haven't seen any changes in my English abilities

Thats why I am looking for a new room.

My agent has a two weeks' notice system, so I have to make a decision today.

I am still thinking about it, because I have to tell him that I will change the room

It was really hot yesterday. Or: "It was really hot today." Time, (past or present) should be consistent in your story.

I guess there must be a lot of people at the beach.

Many people were wearing red hats on the street. When?

My roommates went to the beach, but for some reason I didn't go with them,

I was so bored, but during the day I was relaxed, unlike at yesterday's crazy party.

?I inspected some rooms, but I couldn't even check out two rooms of them. ? You are looking for another place to live?I have looked at other places, but I couldn't check out the two places I visited because,

(I mean, I couldn't meet with the owner of the two places I wanted to look at)

I couldn't find a better place (to live) today either.

but I won't write it down)

That is why I am looking for new place to live.

My agent has a two week notice policy, so I had to make a decision today. "week" is singular because "a two week notice" is an adjectival phrase modifying "policy", which is singular.

I am still thinking of it, because I have to notify my agent as to when I will move Or: ".....as to when I will be leaving."

even if I haven't found an alternative place (to live).

It have to take that risk.

The time limit is less than one hour. "I have less than one hour to decide."

Today was one of the worst Christmases of my life.

It was really hot yesterday/today.

I can guess bet that there are so many people at the beach.

My roommates went to the beach but I didn't follow them for some reason,

I was so bored, but during the day time, I could be relaxed unlike yesterday's crazy party.

I went to look at some rooms, but I couldn't even check out two rooms of them.

(I mean I couldn't meet with the owner of the two rooms I wanted to look at)

I haven't seen any changes in my English abilities. of

and I need to change my lifestyle.

but I won't write it down)

That's why I am looking for a new room.

My agent has a two weeks' notice system, so I had to make a decision today.

I am still thinking about it, because I have to notify my agent when I will move the room

even if I haven't found an alternative place.

I have to take a risk.

I have less than one hour to decide.

Today was one of the worst Christmases of my life.

It was really hot. Comment: This is OK, too.

I can guess that there are so many people on the beach. (more natural --> "I bet there are so many people at the beach")

Many people wore red hats on the street. (This is OK I think)

My roommates went to the beach but I didn't follow them for some reason,

I was so bored, but during the day time, I could be relaxed unlike at yesterday's crazy party.

I inspected some rooms, but I couldn't even check out two of the rooms.

(I mean I couldn't meet with the owner of the two rooms)

I haven't seen any changes in my English abilities

but I won't write it down)

That's why I am looking for a new room.

I am still thinking about it, because I have to tell if I will move

Today was one of the worst Christmases in my life.