Hope the NiCD battery will be helpful to the family.

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Aug 11, 2012 01:12
I shipped the new battery to a mother living in San Francisco before departing to Korea.

I took my youngest daughter to the Japan Post Office in Kyoto while carrying the luggage in the rear basket of my Mama Bicycle. I successfully ordered the shipment to it.

But, it was a same that the weight of the shipped battery was more heavy than I examined how the weight was before ordering it. Its weight should have been shown 1.5kg, but it was realistically 4.67kg. The EMS charge was more than expected. I told it to her. She seems to be happy to pay the charge. But, sorry for misinformed it to her beforehand.

Anyway, hope that it will be helpful to the mother and her daughter. They seem that they would wait for the extra battery. I will be glad if they will be able to use it happily.
Mike
Thank you for your correction!
Aug 11, 2012 05:45
  • I successfully ordered the shipment to it.

  • I successfully ordered the shipment to it.

    I think "The shipment was successful" or "The shipment was a success" would be ok here.

 
  • But, it was a same that the weight of the shipped battery was more heavy than I examined how the weight was before ordering it.

  • But, it was a shame that the weight of the shipped battery was heavier than I imagined the weight would be before ordering it.

    I replaced "more heavy" with "heavier". When you wrote "ordering", did you mean when you got the battery or when you shipped the battery? If it's when you shipped the battery, then the ending of the sentence above should be "before shipping it."

 
  • Its weight should have been shown 1.5kg, but it was realistically 4.67kg.

  • Its weight should have been 1.5kg, but it was actually 4.67kg.

    For the beginning of the sentence, you could say "It should have weighed 1.5kg". You could also say "but it actually weighed 4.67kg." for the rest of the sentence. You could even omit the "it" if you wanted to.

 
  • I told it to her.

  • I told it to her.

    "I told her the EMS charge." sounds ok too.

 
  • But, sorry for misinformed it to her beforehand.

  • Sorry for the misinformation.

    It sounds like you're using beforehand to say sorry in advance, but otherwise I wouldn't use beforehand in this sentence.

 
  • They seem that they would wait for the extra battery.

  • It seems that they would wait for the extra battery.

 

Besides some corrections, it sounds good. Seems like a big battery, although not as big as a car battery.

Aug 11, 2012 09:37 shuichi
添削ありがとう　バッテリーはちょっとおもかったね

Aug 11, 2012 14:36 Mike
ああ、そうです。I'm always glad to do so. :)
golden1412
Thank you for your correction!
Aug 11, 2012 14:56
  • I successfully ordered the shipment to it.

  • I successfully ordered the shipment for it.

 
  • But, it was a same that the weight of the shipped battery was more heavy than I examined how the weight was before ordering it.

  • But, it was a same that the weight of the shipped battery was more heavy than I examined before ordering it.

 

Wow, that's a big difference in the weight. I wounder why...

Aug 11, 2012 20:45 shuichi
え、やっぱりそう思うよね　なんか失敗した感じするわ
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