The Morning Meals Again...

I want to write a kinda funny story....

Because of the meal I'm going to gain weight.

But I will jog and I never don't eat it every day.

I took my daughters to the McDonald's near the Shijyo-Karasuma intersection.

While I sometimes go there with them,

I usually go to a cafe and coach their studies help them with their homework.

"coach their studies" is okay, but we don't say that much in English. It's much more common for a parent to say they're going to "help their kids with their homework".

Its worth coming here.

I will practically explain the biking and the breakfast.

It is the nearest McDonald's from my apartment,

within ten minutes' ride.

And The fair inexpensive meal is very attractive,

and the room is very new, large and comfortable.

No clerk employee says that "Please close your laptop for other customers" like at Starbucks, which I like though.

I want to write a kinda funny story....

Eating McDonald's is not good.

Because of The meal will make my weight increase.

It is almost always better style to write in the active, and often it sounds much more natural (I don't know of many native speakers who would write the above sentence). http://www.englishpage.com/verbpage/activepassive.html teaches you how to tell if you are writing in the active or in the passive, if you are unsure.

But I will jog and I avoid eating it every day, though.

So please don't judge me :) ( By whom?

I would say "don't judge" instead of forgive, because people usually don't consider your eating McDonalds to be harmful to them (something they need to forgive), but they will judge you for it (i.e. think of you as a lesser person because you eat there).

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I took my daughters to the McDonald's near the Shijyo-Karasuma intersection one time.

Well, I've actually sometimes gone there with them more than that.

The corrections in gray are not for grammar, only to make it more funny (i.e. you sound more embarrassed about the trips to McDonald's).

I usually go to a cafe, though, and I tutor them there.

It just sounds more natural this way. Coaching usually refers to sports, whereas tutoring is an action involving academics exclusively.

Look at her smile.

To see it is worth coming here.

I will practically explain the biking and the breakfast.

I would say "I will give an explanation for the biking and breakfast." But the way you wrote it is correct. Also, you didn't really mention biking... (Did you take your daughters to the McDonald's by bike? If so, you need to make that clearer earlier in your writing).

The McDonald's near the Shijyo-Karasuma intersection is the nearest McDonald from my apartment.

It is within ten minutes' ride.

The fair meal there is very attractive, too

and the eating area there is very new, large and comfortable.

No clerk there asks that I close my laptop like they do at Starbucks, a restaurant that I like nonetheless.

"Please close your laptop for other customers" doesn't make sense. Why would closing your laptop benefit other customers? I changed the quote to indirect quotation, but I'm sure someone else can give you a good way to still use direct quotation if that is important to you. Also, I am assuming you are referring to the restaurant not the policy of no open laptops when you say "which I like though" If you like the policy, you should say "a policy I like at coffee shops but not restaurants" or something like that.

After having breakfast there we can stay to study.

As you might expected, I really have no choice.

I am not sure if the way you wrote it is correct, but the way I wrote it sounds a lot more natural to me. I changed the "may" to "really" to add exaggeration to your argument, which I think makes it funnier.

Forgive me.

Actually, I think that "forgive me" is funnier here, but "don't judge me" is more realistic. I would keep it here and change it above, but that is just my personal opinion.

It is not good.