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Could you please correct my essay?

These days, people attend college for many reasons, such as to gain knowledge, make new friends, and increase job opportunities.

I decided to come to college because I have a specific future goal which is to successfully work as a veterinary technician successfully.

A veterinary technician is a person trained to assist veterinarians, and she must have a certificate in order to work as a technician.

I go to college because it offers the certificate, and helps teach me proper English.



I am attending college so I can get a certificate of veterinary technician.

There are a large number of jobs in the world, such as a chef, garbage collector, game programmer, pharmacist, pilot, and president, each person has their own job that they want to work at.

Some people prefer making hamburgers and French fries at a fast food restaurant.

Some people dislike working with computers and prefer becoming a teacher at an elementary school.

People must earn their living. I have to work from morning to night for my income, and if my job is not interesting or fun, my life would be boring.

Thinking about my future, I thought I want to do something I like, or I want to do because I have to work for a couple of decades. For me taking care of sick animals are my disable jobs, and becoming a veterinary technician is suitable.

I am attending college to acquire my disable job.

Second reason I am attending college is because I can improve English literacy.

As an international student, my reading, writing, and speaking abilities in English are far inferior to native English speakers.

I still make a lot of grammatical mistakes, and do not have enough vocabulary to write an essay, so I always need to depend on my dictionary.

Possessing proper English is the minimum requirement for foreigners because without it, we will not be able to have jobs.

My desirable job is to become a veterinary technician.

In order to obtain the career, I must be able to speak proper English to clients, who visit the veterinary hospital for their sick pets.

I must also have listening skills, otherwise I will misunderstand what the doctor says to me, and this might be a cause of a big problem.

At college, professor always collect my English, and I can prepare for my career.

Acquiring professional literacy is related to a successful life as a veterinary technician.



I am attending college for my career.

At college, I can acquire a certificate of veterinary technician.

I can also improve English literacy which is necessary for me to become professional.

College is a place where I can prepare for my career.




Thanks a lot=)

Posted at Wed Apr 18 19:19:45 UTC 2012
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1431385 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1431385 Abby Wed Apr 18 19:19:45 UTC 2012 Please correct my essey. even one correction is appreciated.
Thank you in advance!



In these days, people attend college for many reasons, such as gaining knowledge, making new friends, and increasing job opportunities.

I decided to come to college because I had a specific future goal working as a veterinary technician successfully.

A veterinary technician is a person trained to assist veterinarians, and she must have a certificate in order to work as a technician.

I go to college because it offers the certificate, and teach me a proper English.



I am attending college because I can get a certificate of veterinary technician.

There are a large number of jobs in the world, such as a chef, garbage collector, game programmer, pharmacist, pilot, and president, each person has their own job that they want to work at.

Some people prefer making hamburgers and French fries at a fast food restaurant.

Some people dislike working with computers and prefer becoming a teacher at an elementary school.

People must earn their living.

I have to work from the morning to the evening for my living, and if my job is not interesting or fun, my life would be boring.

Thinking about my future, I thought I want to do something I like, or I want to do because I have to work for a couple of decades.

For me taking care of sick animals are my disable jobs, and becoming a veterinary technician is suitable.





I am attending college to acquire my disable job.
Second reason I am attending college is because I can improve English literacy.

As an international student, my reading, writing, and speaking abilities in English are far inferior to native English speakers.

I still make a lot of grammatical mistakes, and do not have enough vocabulary to write an essay, so I always need to depend on my dictionary.

Possessing proper English is the minimum requirement for foreigners because without it, we will not be able to have jobs.

My desirable job is to become a veterinary technician.

In order to obtain the career, I must be able to speak proper English to clients, who visit the veterinary hospital for their sick pets.

I must also have listening skills, otherwise I will misunderstand what the doctor says to me, and this might be a cause of a big problem.

At college, professor always collect my English, and I can prepare for my career.

Acquiring professional literacy is related to a successful life as a veterinary technician.



I am attending college for my career.

At college, I can acquire a certificate of veterinary technician.

I can also improve English literacy which is necessary for me to become professional.

College is a place where I can prepare for my career.


Posted at Wed Apr 18 10:08:03 UTC 2012
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1430385 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1430385 Abby Wed Apr 18 10:08:03 UTC 2012 Could you please correct it?
It is an unfinished long essay, even one collection is really appreciated.
Thank you in advance=)





Male Reproductive System of Dogs

Every body part in animals is essential and meaningful, and each owns a different chore from others.

Male reproductive system is also important because without it, animals cannot produce a descendant.

The task of male reproductive system is to produce male sex hormones, develop male reproductive cells, and deliver at the appropriate time (391 clinical anatomy and physiology).

However, it is not that simple, and there are more than those occur at the same time. Depending on what kind of animals, there are slightly differences on organs as well as their functions.

I chose dogs, one of the closest animals to humans, and their male reproductive systems are pretty interesting.

To start with, the male reproductive system of dog needs to produce male reproductive cells, spermatozoa.

A spermatozoon, a cell, has three parts; a head, midpiece, and tail, whose shape resembles a tadpole.

Its head has the nucleus of the cell, and is covered by the acrosome. A spermatozoon would not be able to reach the ovum without the acrosome because it has digestive enzyme, which penetrate the layer around the ovum.

A spermatozoon also owns a large mitochondria, the source of energy, in its midpiece because it has to travel a long distance to reach the ovum in the female body.

The rest of its body is a long thin tail, and it produces a whip-like movement to move forward. Depending on the size of the dogs, the number of sperms produced is different.

The middle size from 35 to 39 lb of dogs produces around 472 millions of sperms daily (---------------).


Testes, the male gonads, are where spermatozoa are produced in a sac of skin called the scrotum.

They are located outside the abdomen in the inguinal region (textbook 391). They have two important functions; spermatogenesis and hormone production.

The former is the process of producing of spermatozoa. There are seminterous tubes in the testes, and they are the place where spermatozoa are produced.

On the periphery of the tube, there are parent cells, and push daughter cells as they divide. Spermatocytes are male eukaryotic germ cells divided from the parent cell by mitosis, and the primary spermatocytes divide to produce secondary spermatocytes.

They divide again to produce immature male sex cells called spermatids, and they finally grow into mature spermatozoon.

In seminterous tubes, there are also stertoli cells which function as nurses for spermatozoa to help their development.

Nursing spermatids is not the only duty for them, but they also help shield the developing spermatozoa from the body’s immune system.


The latter, the hormone production, is literally the process of producing hormones. In the seminiderous tubes, interstitial cells exist, and they produce male sex hormones, called androgen.

The hormone is essential for the male reproduction because they produce testosterone, which develop male secondary sex characteristics, such as the male body shape and the sex drive.


A testis is divided by septa inside, and each is filled with 1 to 4 highly coiled seminiferous tubes, which is more than70 centimeters long when uncoiled. The other sides of the seminiferous tubes are united together, and are linked rete testis, which located between testes and epididymis.

Epididimis is a ribbon-like structure, which is actually very long tube, lied along the surface of the testes. It continues as the vasdeferens, a passageway of tube. Spermatozoa are stored in epidiymis, and they wait for when ejaculated.

The scrotum is the sac of skin, which holds testes inside. It has an important function to keep the temperature in testes little lower than body’s to produce spermatozoa.

It is attached to the cremaster muscle that adjusts the position of testes. In a warm temperature, the muscle becomes relaxed, and expands the area of scrotum, so that the scrotum can lower its temperature.

On the other hand, when it is cold, the cremaste muscle pulls testes up, and reduces the area of the scrotum surface. The temperature of scrotum is regulated by the cremaste muscle.


The spermatic cord, which is the only connection of testes and the rest of body, also has an temperature regulation function for spermatozoa.

There are blood vessels, nerves, lymphatic vessels, and vas deferens running the spermatic cord. Lymphatic vessels are veins to circulate interstitial fluid, and vas deferens is the muscular tube that carries sperms and the fluid from the testes.

The reason, testes in the scrotum is kind of a structure hanging from the body is adjust the temperature in the testes.

The body temperature is little too high for spermatozoa, so the spermatic cord makes the temperature of scrotum lower than its body.

There is a single testicular artery carrying blood down to the testes, and this is surrounded by the pampinform plexus.

It is a network of tiny veins spreading out the entire spermatic cord. As body-temperature blood passes down to the testes through the testicular artery, it is cooled by the blood returning from the testes in the pampiniform plexus.


Contrarily, the blood in the pampiniform plexus is warmed by the blood in the testicular artery. The temperature in the testes, where spermatozoa are produced, is ingeniously controlled by the pampiniform plexus.







Posted at Sun Jan 15 16:23:41 UTC 2012
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1269250 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1269250 Abby Sun Jan 15 16:23:41 UTC 2012 I need a favor for my paper. Could you please correct it?
If there are better vocab, please tell me!
Thank you in advance=)

I chose the vet tech program because of my dog.

I had a 5 months old pupy at the age of 11.

He and I were both young, and played each other.

However, as the time passes, I see him becoming weaker, and he carrently need a lot of help.

Dogs get old 4times faster than human.

I understand that I cannot change it, but I can make his decline slower, using my knowledge from the vet tech program.

I can also help other animals as a vet technician.

Working as a veterinary technician is going to be my desirable job because I can help animals.

Posted at Sun Jan 08 17:19:23 UTC 2012
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1258753 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1258753 Abby Sun Jan 08 17:19:23 UTC 2012 If there are better ways to write, please let me know!


Speaking has a big power to change our thoughts. Depending on how you vocalize, you might be able to obtain a well paid job, or you might be judged wrongly by other people. It is a good chance to think how you speak while you have a vocal conversation with your family, friends, colleagues, or boss. How or what you speak can be changeable with your little consideration. Your life might be able to be altered completely by the new way of speaking.

Thank you so much in advance=)



Posted at Mon Dec 05 14:01:28 UTC 2011
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1213569 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1213569 Abby Mon Dec 05 14:01:28 UTC 2011 Could you please correct it, and if there are better ways to wirte, let me know!

Thank you so much in advance=)

People vocalize because it is a means of communication with other people and an expression of themselves.

However, at the same time, we obtain other information as well from their speaking.

Pygmalion, a story of a flower girl, who gets out of poverty with improving her speaking, insists that speaking is not just a communication tool, but it is also utilized to evaluate people’s abilities for careers, social classes, and personalities.

Mauro E. Mujica, John Esling, and Maxine Hong Kingston from Exploring Language certify it in their articles.

People are judged by their speaking.

Posted at Sat Dec 03 15:44:59 UTC 2011
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1210839 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1210839 Abby Sat Dec 03 15:44:59 UTC 2011
This is the last body paragraph.

People often misjudge other people’s personalities by their speaking as well as their social classes.

People believe speaking is proportional to social class, and this causes us misunderstand other people’s personalities.

In the first scene of the play the flower girl, Eliza and Professor Higgins encounter each other, Eliza seems unrefined and has no manners, and Professor Higgins looks like a gentleman.

However, as they associate and communicate more, they both have quite different personalities. This is often caused because people are deluded with their speaking and social classes.

Professor Higgins, who is in the higher social class and speaks proper English, is conjectured as a courteous person by other people.

However, in his private, he handles others roughly and has no manners.

On the other hand, the destitute flower girl, Eliza, who does not know how to speak properly, is conceptualized as an impolite person, and her real personality is just a single minded person that needs to survive in poverty.

Our fixed ideas of social classes and language often lead us into misjudging our personalities.

In the article, “The Language of Silence”, author Maxine Hong Kingston states a similar concept utilizing her own experience from her childhood.

As a first generation American who was raised in a Chinese immigrant community in America, she both experienced Chinese and American cultures, and had difficulty adjusting herself in utterly different worlds.

While she was in an American school, she did not vocalize much. Looking at how she was different from other children, her teacher became worried and referred her to speech therapy.

However, when she was in a Chinese school, she was considered a normal child, who screamed and liked playing.

She knew that the way of Chinese speaking was noisier and stronger than Americans’, so she adjusted her speaking quieter while she was in the American school.

Her teacher at the American school had a different perspective on her personality from the teacher at the Chinese school, and it was because her speaking hid how she was normally, and adorned herself with a different personality.

Eliza’s and Professor Higgins’ personality are judged wrongly because of their speaking and social classes, and Author Kingston was also misjudged because of her speaking.


Thank you so much!!

Posted at Sat Dec 03 01:36:57 UTC 2011
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1209954 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1209954 Abby Sat Dec 03 01:36:57 UTC 2011 This paragraph is very long, so I really appreciate even one correction.


(second paragraph)

( second body paragraph)


People tend to judge other people’s social classes based on their speaking.

In the play, “Pygmalion”, Eliza, who needs to sell flowers to survive in her poverty stricken world, is not well educated, and cannot speak proper English.

Besides, people in higher classes pay no attention to her. However, after six months of vocal lessens, she becomes an attractive person, and is chosen for the dance partner for the prince at the ball.

Neither her personality nor her social class changes; however, perspectives of her from other people are completely different.

The only difference is her speaking. The idea in the article, “Everyone Has an Accent but Me” is excellently applied to the transition of people’s thoughts about Eliza.

According to the author, John Esling, most people think they do not have accents.

Accent is the way in which someone pronounces words, influence by the country or area they come from, or their social class.

When people hear someone talking with a similar accent to them, they consider that he or she is normal or standard.

However, when they hear an accent that is different from them or unfamiliar, they consider that he or she has an accent, and try to categorize according to accents they have heard before.

Without noticing, we often try to define who they are from their accents.

At the time of the story of Pygmalion, people are strict about the social classes and hierarchy, and they only socialized with people in their same classes.

Despite the fact, Eliza from the gutter is treated equally by people in higher classes, and it is because her proper speaking is similar to people who are well educated.

Although, people nowadays do not consider so much about other people’s social classes, they still try to define who they are from their speaking which people in the play do.


This is the second body paragraph. If you have time and are interseted in my essay, please check my another entries.

Thank you in advance!



Posted at Sat Dec 03 01:33:18 UTC 2011
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1209947 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1209947 Abby Sat Dec 03 01:33:18 UTC 2011
I need your help with my paper.
This is a very long essay, so I really appreciate if you correct even ONE mistake.

This is one of the body paragraphs, and the hypothesis is that "people are judged by their speaking."

(first paragraph)

In order to acquire a career and succeed in America, people must speak English fluently and properly.

“Why the U.S. Need an Official Language” clearly describes that immigrants, who cannot speak English very well, are in the same class as the character of Eliza in the play.

According to the author, Mauro E. Mujica, a large number of immigrants come to America to obtain better jobs and lives, and this number has still been increasing every year; however, a lot of them are not educated in English academics, and are not able to speak English at all.

Despite the fact, they can still live in the U.S. with no problems, and this is because the American government generally supports immigrants.

For instance, election ballots and driving exams are written in various languages, and in health care industry, such as clinics and hospitals, there are translators available for non English speakers.

These systems look convenient and efficient for them; however, in truth, this causes immigrants a disadvantage that reduces their motivation to learn English.

Most immigrants, who come to seek better jobs in the U.S., cannot usually afford money to go to school.

As a result, they can only acquire manual labors that do not require communications in English with other people.

Even though immigrant people can live comfortably in the U.S. without the ability to speak English, they must have English communication skills in order to acquire a career.

In Eliza’s situation from the play, she was not even able to be employed, and all she could do before she met Professor Higgins was sell flowers on the streets because she did not own enough finance for school and learn proper English.

Even though Eliza and immigrants in the U.S. are in slightly different situations, they both cannot speak English well, and cannot acquire well established careers.


If you can help me, I have two more body paragraphs. Please check them out.

I really thank you!!

Posted at Sat Dec 03 01:28:26 UTC 2011
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1209944 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1209944 Abby Sat Dec 03 01:28:26 UTC 2011
The topic is

"Are humans more depended on gestures or speech?"


Here is one of my body paragraphs. It is very long so even one correction is appreciated.

Thank you in advance!

One of the reasons we are more depended on speech than gestures is that speech has an ability to convey details.
There are many people utilizing gestures while their conversations think that it is impossible to express themselves without a gesture.
However, all they do with gestures is just to emphasize their speech or emotions, not details.
Gestures are merely an accessory of what we say.
With signed language that has all the lexical and grammatical complexity of spoken language, we can have a conversation with other people; however, our gestures in daily lives are completely different.
It does not own any grammars or vocabulary, which are necessary to specify details.
Infants, who are not yet skilled in language are a good example that gestures do not have an ability of sending details.
When infants cry, their parents must guess what their needs are.
First, they check their babies’ diapers, and next they try to feed some milk.
If they are still crying, their parents hold babies in their arms.
Sometimes these do not work for them, and their parents become stressed because they know their babies need something but are not able to capture what it is.
Infants can tell sadness or happiness by facial expressions, crying or smiling; however, it cannot tell details which are most important for a communication.
We can utilize gestures with vocal language, but with itself, a dialogue cannot be formed.
On the other hand, speech, which has vocabulary for every object and tenses, can be successful as a conversation.

Posted at Fri Nov 04 10:18:58 UTC 2011
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1168845 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1168845 Abby Fri Nov 04 10:18:58 UTC 2011
Could you please explain it roughly in English?
This is the paragraph.


The deaf and the blind find it very difficult to acquire the amenities of conversation. How much more this difficulty must be augmented in the case of those who are both deaf and blind! They cannot distinguish the tone of the voice or, without assistance, go up and down the gamut of tones that give significance to words; nor can they watch the expression of the speaker's face, and a look is often the very soul of what one says.

I kind of understand but I do not know what she is trying to say.


Thank you in advance=)

Posted at Mon Oct 31 03:51:38 UTC 2011
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1163058 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1163058 Abby Mon Oct 31 03:51:38 UTC 2011
Could you please read the paragraph below and explain it for me???

Thank you!




Instead of allowing free discussion and debate to occur, many gung-ho advocates of politically correct language seem to think that simple suppression of a word or concept will magically make the problem disappear. In the "Bias-Free Word Finder," Ms. Maggio entreats the reader not to perpetuate the negative stereotype of Eve. "Be extremely cautious in referring to the biblical Eve," she writes; "this story has profoundly contributed to negative attitudes toward women throughout history, largely because of misogynistic and patriarchal interpretations that labeled her evil, inferior, and seductive."



Posted at Fri Oct 14 07:06:37 UTC 2011
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1139337 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1139337 Abby Fri Oct 14 07:06:37 UTC 2011
This paragraph's point is that the prohibition of certain words, phrases and ideas limit freedom of expression and speech.
I am not sure if I really understand this article correctly, so could you please read the paragraph and tell me if the point I am thinking is correct or not??

Thank you in advance=)

In the case of the politically correct, the prohibition of certain words, phrases and ideas is advanced in the cause of building a brave new world free of racism and hate, but this vision of harmony clashes with the very ideals of diversity and inclusion that the multi-cultural movement holds dear, and it's purchased at the cost of freedom of expression and freedom of speech.



Posted at Fri Oct 14 06:52:54 UTC 2011
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1139327 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1139327 Abby Fri Oct 14 06:52:54 UTC 2011
Thank you so much in advance!




The author, Barbara Wallraff clarifys in her article, "What Global Language?" that globalization of English is not going to happen the way people expect it to be because of two reasons; demographics and technology.

In the world, population, who speak a language other than English, is far more than native English speakers.

Moreover, we cannot project how many people can actually speak English because there are immigration, bilingual, or multilingual.

There are a large number of people who speak English as a second or a foreign language; however, it is only speculative because there is no such things that distingush how well many of them speak and understand it.

Technology, especially Internet, is also connected to his resoning of why English is not going to be the grobal language.

Over the past few years, most of what is available on the Internet is in English; however, in next few years, Internet traffic in languages other than English will increase and outstrip that of English.

The reason is that Internet has been propagated in the world and more non native English speakers have been logging on, searching, and creating content in their native languages.

Furthermore, immigrants can browse periodicals and listen to the radio in their native languages and this remains their skills considerably.

A lot of people in the world are eager to study English but this does not imply that native English speakers do not need to do anything.

They should do what other people are doing, and this will help them communicate and understand others better.






Posted at Wed Oct 12 08:07:48 UTC 2011
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1136310 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1136310 Abby Wed Oct 12 08:07:48 UTC 2011



Requiring a third language would be helpful for a international student because they can improve English through other languages.

It is going to be difficult for international students to take a foregn language because they are taught anther language in English.

However, there is still an enormous benefit to learning a third language.

In the article, "Good English and Bad, the author, Bill Bryson clarifies that English grammer is so complex and confusing because its rules and terminology are based on Latin.

As you know, there are a couple of languages such as Italian, Spanish, and Portuguese, founded upon Latin, and thoes own a large number of similarities in vocabulary and grammer structures.

For international students, specially from the East Asia, learning those languages would also benefit their English skills because they are able to expand their vocabulary from those languages developed from Latin.

I consider that it is not only those languages, but any languages can be helpful for international students to imprve their English because modern English is consisted of a large variety of language.

Looking at what people speak in the U.S. currently, we will be soon able to find that English has pleasantly accepted any language and commanded them.

For example, "Tsunami" and "Typhoon" were originally Japanese, and "silk " is from Chinese; however, nowadays people on the U.S. utilize them as their language.

International students would be able to obtain better understanding of English from the different point of view.

I believe that learning a third language can develop international students' English because English has similaities to other languages.


Posted at Wed Oct 12 03:25:04 UTC 2011
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1136052 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1136052 Abby Wed Oct 12 03:25:04 UTC 2011

It is a good opportunity for students, who speak languages other than English at home, to learn their first language as a foreign language for admission or graduation at college.

Immigrant students or second or third gereration immigrants, who are taught other languages from an early age by their parents at home, might think that they are flawless bilingual and it is utterly unnecessary to learn their first language at college.

However, the truth is most are only skilled in daily conversations, not writing or reading..

According to the two article, "Why the U.S. needs an official language" and "What global language?", there are 2.4 million Chinese speakers in the U.S. and over forty percent of the populaton is made up with Hispanics in Hartford, Connecticut, but these results do not signify the numbers of population who are proficient in literacy.

Even though immigrant parents choose their mother tongue as their family languages, and forbid their children to speak English at home, it is only able to develop their childrens's speaking abilities.

Literacy is a completely differnt story.

In a daily life, parents do not have many chances to teach their children literacy of their first language, such as how to combine sentences, or where to put a comma or a semicolon in a sentence.

Moreover, parents are not professional of linguistic.

I beleive that teaching a language requires accurate knowledge and skills in teaching.

At college or university, professors can teach students subjects that are not able to be taught from conversation.

There will be a lot of people who are fluent speakers in two or more languges; however, the number of bilingual literate people will fall short or our expectation.

If foreign languages are required for admission or graduation, bilingual students whould be able to advance their literary as well as conversation abilities.


Posted at Wed Oct 12 03:11:09 UTC 2011
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1136034 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1136034 Abby Wed Oct 12 03:11:09 UTC 2011 Could you correct it please?

The U.S. is often called a melting pot because people from different races, countries, or social classes come and live together.

As a familiar place, college is a good example.

There are native English speakers, who live in only English environments, immigrants, who fluently speak in bilingualism, and International students, who temporarily stay for education, like myself.

Thoes people sit side by side, and utilize English to communicate with others in class.

However, one step out of school, you can see people sepaking in different languages, and advertisments, signboards of restaurants, or warnings in transportation are written in a variety of languages.

If people comprehend more than a language in this country, it would be a convinient arm and prfit.

Therefore, I believe, learning another language in this country would positively influence every student.

Colleges and universities should require foreign language study for admission or graduation.


Posted at Wed Oct 12 03:03:28 UTC 2011
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1136023 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1136023 Abby Wed Oct 12 03:03:28 UTC 2011
This is my conclusion. Could you please correct it? and also if there is better way to write, please let me know.

Requiring foreign language for admission or graduation at college in America would bring advantages to everyone. For immigrants, it is a perfect chance to improve their literacy of their first languages. International students can deepen comprehension of English, and Americans can better understand on foreigners. Learning and acquiring a language necessitates numerous efforts and time, so some students hesitate or avoid it. What they need is a little push, so that they can take a fist step, and they will soon become aware of how great learning foreign language is.



Thank you in advance!

Posted at Tue Oct 04 08:53:29 UTC 2011
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1124699 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1124699 Abby Tue Oct 04 08:53:29 UTC 2011 Could you please correct it?
Thank you so much in advance!




It is the Americans who should learn foreign language.
As an International student from Japan, I have a strong accent, and it often makes me hesitate before I speak out and feel pessimistically isolated from English native speakers here.
Accent is the way in which someone pronounces words.
From listening to others speak, we can define who we are because it reflects the places we have been and things we have done (Esling 154).
Even if I make an effort to become a native speaker in the U.S, my accent will not disappear perfectly because of my background.
However, this has been the source of energy to attempt learning English for me, and currently my English skills have reached the level of taking classes at college in the U.S.
Since arriving in America, I can feel a great benefit of understanding two languages. For instance, I can analyze a problem from different angles. Recently, there was a dreadful earthquake in my home country, and a large number of people were victims of the Tsunami.
I was in San Francisco at the time and watched news programs broadcasted in both Japan and America. However the way of being reported the damage and conditions by American news programs was little different from that in Japan.
I consider that it was because Tsunami victims were able to describe us what they experienced and how the situation was like by their own word.
Through the T.V, world news are translated into English and transmitted to all over America.
However, there is sometimes a little gap occurred when being translated because each language do not share the same expression, way of speaking, or phrase. Consequently, we often need to consider what is the closer meaning, when we translate languages.
If Americans have abilities of understanding a foreign language, they will be able to better communicate and understand properly what a foreigner actually wants to tell.
At the present time, Americans do not have a chance to learn other language as much as non English speakers because everything is translated into English. That is why requiring foreign language for admission or graduation would be a good opportunity for Americans to see from a different viewpoint.




Posted at Tue Oct 04 07:11:03 UTC 2011
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It is a good opportunity for students, who speak languages other than English at home, to learn their first language as a foreign language for admission or graduation at college.
Immigrant students or second or third generation immigrants, who are taught other languages from an early age by their parents at home, might think that they are flawless bilingual and it is utterly unnecessary to learn their first language at college.
However, the truth is most are only skilled in daily conversations, not writing or reading.
According to the two articles, “Why the U.S. needs an official language” and “What global language?”, there are 2.4 million Chinese speakers in the U.S. and over forty percent of the population is made up with Hispanics in Hartford, Connecticut, but these results do not signify the numbers of population who are proficient in literacy.
Even though immigrant parents choose their mother tongue as their family languages, and forbid their children to speak English at home, it is only able to develop their children’s speaking abilities.
Literacy is a completely different story.
For instance, my friend, a Japanese American, who has been raised with only Japanese at home, has perfect abilities in speaking both Japanese and English, and has never felt inconvenient in conversation of both languages.
However, compared to his English literacy, his Japanese writing or reading abilities are far inferior, and I can often discover mistakes in his Japanese writing which would never been mistaken by people who are educated in Japanese. At college or university, professors can teach students subjects that are not able to be taught from conversation, such as how to write an essay.
There will be a lot of people who are fluent speakers in two or more languages; however the number of bilingual literate people will fall short of our expectation.
If foreign language is required for admission or graduation, bilingual students would be able to advance their literary as well as conversation abilities.



It is going to be difficult for international students to take a foreign language class in English; however, there is still an enormous benefit to learning a third language.
In the article, “Good English and Bad, the author, Bill Bryson clarifies that English grammar is so complex and confusing because its rules and terminology are based on Latin.
As you know, there are a couple of languages, such as Italian, Spanish, and Portuguese, founded upon Latin, and those own a large number of similarities in vocabulary and grammar structures.
For international students especially from the East Asia, learning those languages would also benefit their English skills because they are able to expand their vocabulary from those languages developed from Latin.
I consider that it is not only those languages, but any languages can be helpful for international students to improve their English because modern English is consisted of a large variety of languages.
Looking at what people speak in the U.S. currently, we will be soon able to find that English has pleasantly accepted any language and commanded them.
For example, “Tsunami” and “Typhoon” were originally Japanese, and “silk” is from Chinese; however, nowadays people in the U.S. utilize them as their language.
International students would be able to obtain better understanding of English from the different point of view.
I believe that learning third language can develop international students’ English because English has similarities to other languages.


Posted at Mon Oct 03 20:15:14 UTC 2011
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1124071 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/1124071 Abby Mon Oct 03 20:15:14 UTC 2011 Could you please explain easier in English for me???

They believe that the Second Amendment to the Constitution, which states that “[a] well regulated Militia, being necessary to the security of a free State, the right of the people to keep and bear Arms shall not be infringed,”
is being misread in today’s modern society.

They argue that the Second Amendment (1) is now obsolete, with the presence of professional police forces; (2) was intended solely to guard against suppression of state militias by the central government and therefore restricted in scope by that intent; and (3) does not guarantee a right that is absolute, but one that can be limited by reasonable requirements.



Posted at Mon Apr 11 04:00:18 UTC 2011
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I am so nervous to take the exam because my midterm grade was only 70.2. It is almost D. I can not get C or D anymore. I need A or B.

Please wish me luck.

I am going back to studying.


Have a nice day!

Abby


Posted at Sun Nov 21 19:05:29 UTC 2010
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I am leaving to Vegas this coming Saturday.






I am leaving to Japan on June 2nd!!!





I am excited to go Vegas though I am really looking forward to going back to Japan.







Posted at Mon May 24 17:15:15 UTC 2010
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/494583 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/494583 Abby Mon May 24 17:15:15 UTC 2010 The way of this diet is....

You can eat whatever you want.
You do not have to work out.


But there is a rule....


That is what you have to drink a spoon and half of olive oil.

That's it.

That's is all you have to do.


How easy...

I have started the diet since yesterday.
I will let you know if it is going well.
I won't if it is not going well.


If you are interested in the diet, please check more detail about the diet because there are some small rules.




Posted at Fri Jan 15 00:06:45 UTC 2010
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Lastnight, I made a cheese cake for my friends.
I will be happy if they like the cake.

This was my second time to make cake. So it will be better than the first one.



By the way, this picture was taken in San Francisco.
It is beautiful, is not it???

Posted at Tue Jan 12 20:59:54 UTC 2010
]]> http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/337687 http://lang-8.com/101637/journals/337687 Abby Tue Jan 12 20:59:54 UTC 2010 Beautiful room makes me feel refreshed.


I was shocked, because there was so much dust in my room.
I will try clean my room more often.













Posted at Mon Jan 11 20:33:45 UTC 2010
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I hope everyone is having a good time.



ps, Santa did not come to my house...

Posted at Fri Dec 25 17:17:21 UTC 2009
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