please correct my essay introduction!

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Dec 4, 2011 00:44
I have been writing an essay, and this is the introduction.
Could you please correct it, and if there are better ways to wirte, let me know!

Thank you so much in advance=)

People vocalize because it is a means of communication with other people and an expression of themselves.

However, at the same time, we obtain other information as well from their speaking.

Pygmalion, a story of a flower girl, who gets out of poverty with improving her speaking, insists that speaking is not just a communication tool, but it is also utilized to evaluate people’s abilities for careers, social classes, and personalities.

Mauro E. Mujica, John Esling, and Maxine Hong Kingston from Exploring Language certify it in their articles.

People are judged by their speaking.