I need your help with my essay=)

Hello everyone, I had an writing assignment, and the topic is that whether we should require a foreign language for admission or graduation in college.

I wrote 2 body paragraphs. It is very long, so even one correction is appreciated, if you do not have time. Thank you so much in advance!



It is a good opportunity for students, who speak languages other than English at home, to learn their first language as a foreign language for admission or graduation at college.
Immigrant students or second or third generation immigrants, who are taught other languages from an early age by their parents at home, might think that they are flawless bilingual and it is utterly unnecessary to learn their first language at college.
However, the truth is most are only skilled in daily conversations, not writing or reading.
According to the two articles, “Why the U.S. needs an official language” and “What global language?”, there are 2.4 million Chinese speakers in the U.S. and over forty percent of the population is made up with Hispanics in Hartford, Connecticut, but these results do not signify the numbers of population who are proficient in literacy.
Even though immigrant parents choose their mother tongue as their family languages, and forbid their children to speak English at home, it is only able to develop their children’s speaking abilities.
Literacy is a completely different story.
For instance, my friend, a Japanese American, who has been raised with only Japanese at home, has perfect abilities in speaking both Japanese and English, and has never felt inconvenient in conversation of both languages.
However, compared to his English literacy, his Japanese writing or reading abilities are far inferior, and I can often discover mistakes in his Japanese writing which would never been mistaken by people who are educated in Japanese. At college or university, professors can teach students subjects that are not able to be taught from conversation, such as how to write an essay.
There will be a lot of people who are fluent speakers in two or more languages; however the number of bilingual literate people will fall short of our expectation.
If foreign language is required for admission or graduation, bilingual students would be able to advance their literary as well as conversation abilities.



It is going to be difficult for international students to take a foreign language class in English; however, there is still an enormous benefit to learning a third language.
In the article, “Good English and Bad, the author, Bill Bryson clarifies that English grammar is so complex and confusing because its rules and terminology are based on Latin.
As you know, there are a couple of languages, such as Italian, Spanish, and Portuguese, founded upon Latin, and those own a large number of similarities in vocabulary and grammar structures.
For international students especially from the East Asia, learning those languages would also benefit their English skills because they are able to expand their vocabulary from those languages developed from Latin.
I consider that it is not only those languages, but any languages can be helpful for international students to improve their English because modern English is consisted of a large variety of languages.
Looking at what people speak in the U.S. currently, we will be soon able to find that English has pleasantly accepted any language and commanded them.
For example, “Tsunami” and “Typhoon” were originally Japanese, and “silk” is from Chinese; however, nowadays people in the U.S. utilize them as their language.
International students would be able to obtain better understanding of English from the different point of view.
I believe that learning third language can develop international students’ English because English has similarities to other languages.